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1. Well-written:
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1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.
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1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
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I believe the lead section is too short, and in this particular case it may be indicative of larger problem: the size and depth of the article itself (see 3a).
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2. Verifiable with no original research:
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2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
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2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
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With one minor optional suggestion: The sentence "Out of boredom, Nipper bought an art kit and began painting." is a bit unusual, so it might benefit from an immediate inline citation. (I checked that this information is present in the source that is given after the next sentence in the paragraph, but I am thinking that since it's unusual it needs an immediate verification.)
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2c. it contains no original research.
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2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.
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3. Broad in its coverage:
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3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
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- I think that one important aspect of the topic is omitted -- In the article, I do not see any specific information on her art -- style, opinions of critics, etc. One of the sources that you provided calls Nipper "expressionist" which might not correlate with the only paining that is in the picture. So what was her style (except that she once used montage)? Did she work in different styles? What did art critics like and/or dislike about her work? I would think that an article about an artist should have a section on this subtopic.
- The second section that might be missing is Nipper's horse breeding activities. (This is optional and depends on what role the breeding played in her life.) If so, and since she received a recognition in this area, we might want to learn more than a couple of sentences about it -- another separate section and some summary of that in the lead. What was her contribution to horse breeding in the context of national/statewide horse-breeding?
So, any luck with additional info in either of these areas?
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3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
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4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
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5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
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6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
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6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
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6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
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7. Overall assessment.
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These are my comments after the first reading. For now, my overall suggestion is to fix/discuss the issues above. However, please don't take my comments as condescending instructions set in stone — I'm learning this process myself. So, I am open to discussion, and I am very appreciative to the great work that you've already put into this article.
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