Talk:Iron Soldier 2

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Nominator: KGRAMR (talk · contribs) 21:32, 15 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: ProtoDrake (talk · contribs) 11:10, 20 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]


Hello. I'll take this on as best I can. If I'm not back with anything by this time next week, please ping. --ProtoDrake (talk) 11:10, 20 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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General
  • I noticed some of the references use the numeric year-month-date format outside the citations themselves (for translations).
 Done -- Issue addressed Roberth Martinez (talk) 17:15, 27 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • JTS Corporation double-linked in Dev and Release.
 Done -- Issue addressed Roberth Martinez (talk) 16:45, 27 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    • Ditto Telegames.
 Done -- Issue addressed Roberth Martinez (talk) 16:45, 27 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Atari is triple-linked in Dev, Release and Reception.
 Done -- Issue addressed Roberth Martinez (talk) 16:45, 27 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Atari Jaguar is also triple-linked in Dev, Release and Reception.
 Done -- Issue addressed Roberth Martinez (talk) 16:45, 27 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Atari J CD is once again triple-linked in Gameplay, Dev and Release.
 Done -- Issue addressed Roberth Martinez (talk) 16:45, 27 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Prose
  • "fast attack vehicles (FAVs)," -- This abbreviation isn't used anywhere else.
 Done -- I removed the abbreviation from the prose. Roberth Martinez (talk) 16:52, 27 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • "using only the CD format for full-motion video (FMV) and music tracks." -- More personal opinion than anything, but "only using" would have flowed better given the context of the statement.
 Done -- I rearranged the statement based on your suggestion. Roberth Martinez (talk) 16:52, 27 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The game was nearing completion, but Rosocha alarmingly reached out to Skruch" -- Is "alarmingly" from the actual source? Seems an unencyclopedic way of describing this exchange.
 Done -- I removed the sentence. Roberth Martinez (talk) 16:52, 27 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • The bit about the Atari-JTS merger and Telegames basically saving the project is pretty much repeated in both sections with arbitrarily-different wording. Is there a way the release version could be condensed or rephrased? Seems unnecessary to state this at such length twice.
 Done -- Okay so, i did a more or less condensed version of the sentences in the release section. Hopefully this one sticks the landing. Roberth Martinez (talk) 17:06, 27 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@KGRAMR: That should do as a first round. --ProtoDrake (talk) 09:06, 27 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@ProtoDrake:Done with the first pass! Let me know if there are any lingering details waiting to be addressed. Roberth Martinez (talk) 17:16, 27 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@KGRAMR: Pass. --ProtoDrake (talk) 21:29, 27 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@ProtoDrake:Thank you for taking the time once again to review the article! Roberth Martinez (talk) 22:28, 27 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]