Talk:Takin' It Back/Archive 1

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 19:08, 10 April 2023 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):

   b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a. (reference section):

   b. (citations to reliable sources):

   c. (OR):

   d. (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a. (major aspects):

   b. (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):

   b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/fail:

(Criteria marked are unassessed)

Taking this on proudly per your request! --K. Peake 19:08, 10 April 2023 (UTC)

• Pipe bubblegum pop to Bubblegum music
• You need to write out the production credits in prose for them to be included
• "Artists featured on the album include" → "Featured artists include"
• "The album's lyrical themes revolve" → "The former's lyrical themes revolve"
• Mention some of the shows that the live performances included
• "The album was supported by" → "It was supported by"
• "becoming her first song" → "becoming Trainor's first song"
• "to label it a sequel to" → "to be labeled as a sequel to"
• "It debuted at number 16" → "The former debuted at number 16"

• "she was writing" → "she was recording" per the source
• "as Trainor rewrote it four times in an attempt to "adapt" → "as Trainor rewrote the album four times in an attempt of "adapting" per the source
• Remove commas around Title
• "have the chorus written" → "have the c[horus] written" per the source
• "will be released on October 31," → "would be released on October 21," per the source
• "Its deluxe edition was" → "The deluxe edition was"

• "Its subject matter revolves around her" → "The subject matter revolves around Trainor's"
• "and it's still a party."" → "and it's still a party."" per the source
• "a cappella song built on harmonies and features" → "a cappella song, built on harmonies and featuring"
• "after her pregnancy, and an exercise" → "after her pregnancy and a challenge"
• I would suggest using something more encyclopaedic than rear end
• [8][15] only [8] should be used for the "Shook" sentence; the previous one shall invoke both

• I think how it's done currently is fine as well due to the absence of any direct quotes here.

• Pipe acoustic to Acoustic guitar
• The first sentence about "Superwoman" needs the ref invoked again, as it uses direct quotes
• "that dismissed common narratives" → "that dismisses typical narratives"
• "and acknowledged difficulties faced" → "and acknowledges difficulties faced"
• "she thought would resonate with moms on" → "she thought would resonate with those on" to be more encyclopaedic
• "give your heart a break"." → "give your heart a break."" per MOS:QUOTE on full sentences and invoke the ref here too
• None of the "Remind Me" info is sourced

• ? All of the "Remind Me" info occurs in the Yahoo! source directly following the quote.

• "The album closes with" → "Takin' It Back closes with"
• [9][27][28] should be invoked after all the "Mother" info, with only [9] at the end of the last sentence

• Mention that the performances were in the summer of 2022
• "in the United States on" → "in the US on" per MOS:US, but the archive does not source this
• "and the United Kingdom." → "and the UK." per consistency with above
• Start a new para at the Today performance

• Merge with the below section and retitle to Reception

• The article only has five sections of prose so I would rather not. This section is too huge and it would swallow up the the part about the Commercial performance, whereas I think both of these parts deserve to be highlighted separately and a merged section doesn't transition well.

• "He added, "this doesn't mean" → "He added, "This doesn't mean"
• "Piatkowski thought it reflected" → "Piatkowski thought the album reflected"
• "but believed its ballads," → "but believed the ballads,"
• "after being controlled by her record label on previous releases;" → "after being controlled on previous releases;" per the source
• "ventured into new musical territory and took" → "ventures into new musical territory and takes" for correct tense

• Make this the second para of the above section since one para is too short to stand alone

• See above.

• "Trainor's highest entry since her second major-label studio album," → "becoming Trainor's highest entry since her second major-label studio album"
• I'd suggest only mentioning top 50 positions here, as below is not notable for prose

• Given the dearth of international chart entries for this album, I think the very few ones can all be comfortably mentioned.

• Pipe Maureen McDonald to Mozella

• Pipe Ajay Bhattacharyya to Stint (producer)
• Pipe Theron Theron to R. City

• Good

• Good

• Copyvio score looks decent at 39.8%
• Pipe Billboard to Billboard (magazine) on ref 5
• Pipe People to People (magazine) on ref 6
• Shouldn't you pipe Meghan Trainor Store to Meghan Trainor on ref 12?
• For refs 14, 18, 34, 44, 53 and 54, the formatting of Official Charts should be consistent
• Remove or replace ref 24 per WP:FORBES
• Remove Associated Press from ref 26
• Cite YouTube as via instead on ref 29
• Cite Today as work/website instead on refs 45, 46 and 47

•  On hold until all of the issues are fixed; I did this just for you at a rapid pace! --K. Peake 10:52, 11 April 2023 (UTC)

Thanks a lot for the in-depth review, K. Peake! All addressed I hope.--NØ 15:58, 11 April 2023 (UTC)

• ✓ Pass now, I did some slight copy editing and this is now ready to go! --K. Peake 19:55, 11 April 2023 (UTC)