Template:Did you know nominations/Snow Halation

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The result was: promoted by SL93 (talk) 01:26, 16 January 2021 (UTC)

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Snow Halation

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Created by Juhachi (talk). Self-nominated at 01:43, 25 December 2020 (UTC).

  • First comment on a DYK nomination. Anyway, I mostly support this nomination, but I have a few comments/questions, which may be taken with some grains of salt:
    • I think "Japanese pop" should be entirely linked to J-pop, since I imagine that people expect "pop" to link to pop music.
    • The text "idol group μ's" should probably be altered as there are two adjacent links to be part of the same text (see MOS:SEAOFBLUE).
    • Is there a better way to quickly write "music video in anime format"? Aside from the aforementioned sea of blue problem, anime music video is a term with a different meaning in anime fandom jargon.
    • Article-wise, the song sample may need to be trimmed per WP:SAMPLE, unless there's a good reason why it's above 30 seconds (though I imagine SiIvaGunner may have already crossed that line).
Todokete indeed. -BRAINULATOR9 (TALK) 22:35, 2 January 2021 (UTC)
Thank you for the review. As an alternative hook for your first three bullet points:
And for the music sample, I had merely included the entire chorus, but I will shorten it to below 26 seconds, 10% of the length of the song.--十八 03:11, 6 January 2021 (UTC)
You're welcome, and that works. Support ALT 1. -BRAINULATOR9 (TALK) 00:54, 7 January 2021 (UTC)
@Brainulator9: Thank you. Please place either {{DYKtick}} or {{DYKtickAGF}} so the nomination can be promoted.--十八 03:04, 7 January 2021 (UTC)
Gotcha. -BRAINULATOR9 (TALK) 03:13, 7 January 2021 (UTC)
@Brainulator9: As far as I can tell a full review for the nomination has yet to be done. Could you please check if all of the DYK criteria are met? Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 09:03, 7 January 2021 (UTC)
@Brainulator9: Reping due to a typo in the previous edit. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 09:04, 7 January 2021 (UTC)

@Narutolovehinata5: If you believe the review was incomplete, then please conduct another review.--十八 11:37, 8 January 2021 (UTC)

  • @Juhachi: Article was new enough and long enough at the time of the nomination. The hook facts are cited inline, and although cited to an offline source, are easily verifiable on any online source discussing the franchise. A QPQ has been done, and no close paraphrasing issues were found. My only concern is that ALT1 reads a little awkwardly and could be rephrased to be a little snappier: perhaps move the mention of SnowHala to the start of the hook? Otherwise a pretty harasho article and nomination. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 10:48, 10 January 2021 (UTC)
About all I can do with the hook without it basically being the original one again is
--十八 12:22, 10 January 2021 (UTC)
I think the original hook is actually fine, if anything it should raise some interest since I presume "anime music video" is not something that most readers would find typical. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 13:25, 10 January 2021 (UTC)
Okay, then we'll go with the original hook.--十八 01:14, 11 January 2021 (UTC) On second thought, considering the original objections to the first hook, I'll give another alternative of it:
--十八 01:22, 11 January 2021 (UTC)
Okay, we should be good to go with ALT3. I personally preferred the original hook (since I don't know if non-anime fans would recognize Sunrise) but I understand the original concerns. Courtesy ping to Brainulator9. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 09:49, 11 January 2021 (UTC)