- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 20:42, 22 June 2020 (UTC)
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Zara Abid
- ... that Pakistani model Zara Abid, one of the 97 victims of PIA Flight 8303, is set to make a posthumous film debut in the biopic Chaudhry? Source for flight 8303, Source for film debut
- Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/1985 Gujarat riots
- Comment: After building several preps with no representation outside of North America and Europe, I am making a push to get articles from under-represented areas into DYK. This is nomination
4in that effort.
Created by Mar4d (talk). Nominated by The Squirrel Conspiracy (talk) at 09:18, 26 May 2020 (UTC).
The only problem that I can see is that the article does not specifically state that it's a posthumous debut. It can be put together, but the readers should not have to do that. SL93 (talk) 22:44, 21 June 2020 (UTC)
- SL93, how about:
- ALT1: .
.. that Pakistani model Zara Abid, who died in May in the crash of PIA Flight 8303, is set to make her film debut later this year with the biopic Chaudhry?
- The Squirrel Conspiracy (talk) 04:03, 22 June 2020 (UTC)
I like that one. Everything checks out for DYK. I also appreciate that you're nominating something outside of North America and Europe. SL93 (talk) 04:16, 22 June 2020 (UTC)
- It's rather awkward to say a dead person is making her film debut. Yoninah (talk) 12:37, 22 June 2020 (UTC)
- Hence the wording in the original hook, which I still think was fine, but wasn't willing to argue about. The Squirrel Conspiracy (talk) 16:56, 22 June 2020 (UTC)
- Original hook is approved. I'm not going to argue over the hook. SL93 (talk) 17:25, 22 June 2020 (UTC)
- Sorry, I don't understand the problem. What do you think about:
- ALT0a:
... that Pakistani model Zara Abid, one of the 97 victims of PIA Flight 8303, makes a posthumous film debut in the biopic Chaudhry?
- Well, in the lead you say it is her film debut. Second try:
- ALT0b: ... that Pakistani model Zara Abid, who made her film debut in the upcoming biopic Chaudhry, died in the crash of PIA Flight 8303? Yoninah (talk) 19:03, 22 June 2020 (UTC)
- I'm fine with that. The Squirrel Conspiracy (talk) 20:21, 22 June 2020 (UTC)
