Exhaustion disorder is currently a Biology and medicine good article nominee. Nominated by Draken Bowser (talk) at 18:17, 24 April 2024 (UTC) An editor has placed this article on hold to allow improvements to be made to satisfy the good article criteria. Recommendations have been left on the review page, and editors have seven days to address these issues. Improvements made in this period will influence the reviewer's decision whether or not to list the article as a good article. Short description: Stress-induced disorder causing fatigue and cognitive disability |
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This article was edited to contain a total or partial translation of Utmattningssyndrom from the Swedish Wikipedia. Consult the history of the original page to see a list of its authors. |
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Nominator: Draken Bowser (talk · contribs) 18:17, 24 April 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: CursedWithTheAbilityToDoTheMath (talk · contribs) 17:56, 14 August 2024 (UTC)
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1. Well-written: | ||
1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct. | In the second comment of the diagnosis section it says "but like ECG may prove useful for differential diagnostics".
Adding some oddly phrased sentences I found my third time reading: " Recovery will generally take from six months to a full year, sometimes longer." - could be worded better. "The diagnosis is not used by any other healthcare system internationally." Other healthcare systems and internationally somewhat imply the same thing. Could be phrased as "the diagnosis is not used outside of Sweeden" "The symptoms of exhaustion disorder are numerous..." I would remove "numerous" and just stick to listing the symptoms. "Exhaustion disorder and depression have several overlapping symptoms and often occur simultaneously..." I feel like overlapping and simultaneously kind of mean the same thing in this context and the sentence could be shortened. "Symptom overlap between exhaustion disorder and other mental disorders is not unusual, but rather a common theme among mental disorders." Not unusual and rather common mean the same thing in this context and I'd get rid of one of the two terms. "As the disease progresses the fatigue compounds, which leads to exhaustion and cognitive decline, and the worsening of other associated symptoms" I feel like this could be shortened to worsening of symptoms and cognitive decline. "For a while thereafter there is usually a marked aversion to the workplace" the usage of both thereafter and there makes this sentence sound odd. "As the overall condition slowly improves the physical symptoms tend to abate, but sleeping disorders and cognitive impairments may remain for a prolonged duration" I would remove "for a prolonged duration". | |
1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. | The article passes all of the criteria except for the layout part. While the article does technically have a proper layout it doesn't follow Template:Article templates/Medical condition. I would try to fix this myself however the way in which the article is currently written makes it hard for me to do so. | |
2. Verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check: | ||
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline. | Personally I would make the notes its own section but that's just preference. | |
2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose). | There were some parts of the article that weren't verified by the source listed, I suspect maybe you made an error in citing the right page as the sources still pertain to the topic they just don't verify the specific information. I added [failed verification] templates to those sentences. It may also be an issue with using a different pdf version of one of the studies however I used the links you provided. I stopped verifying information after the prognosis section because of how big of an issue this is. Note: I was not able to access some of the references so I couldn't verify everything. | |
2c. it contains no original research. | ||
2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism. | ||
3. Broad in its coverage: | ||
3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic. | ||
3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style). | I feel that the background section under history is a bit off-topic, or at least could be condensed in a way that shows how it relates to the article topic. | |
4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each. | ||
5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute. | ||
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio: | ||
6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content. | ||
6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. | ||
7. Overall assessment. | On hold until @Draken Bowser: can address the issues with 1a, 1b, and 2b. |
@CursedWithTheAbilityToDoTheMath: Thanks for taking this on and undertaking a thorough review.
And again, thank you very much for your efforts. Draken Bowser (talk) 21:49, 19 August 2024 (UTC)