Talk:Michael P. Walsh (Jesuit)

GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Michael P. Walsh (Jesuit)/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Nominator: Ergo Sum (talk · contribs) 04:53, 26 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: It is a wonderful world (talk · contribs) 23:33, 24 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]


Continuing my clearance of the GA nominations education section. It is a wonderful world (talk) 23:33, 24 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Prose Magenta clockclock

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In the infobox, shouldn't Boston University tenure information be above Fordham's, since he was there for longer and seems to be more notable for his work there. It is a wonderful world (talk) 23:33, 24 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Early life

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Do we know if he had any religious affiliation before entering the Society of Jesus?

Education

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The "American Society for the Advancement of Science" and "American Association of Zoologists" sound notable enough to be redlinked.

Boston College

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During Walsh's presidency, a number of buildings were constructed, including the Roberts Center, a gymnasium, in 1958, McElroy Commons, a new dining hall, in 1961, and Carney Hall, a faculty office building, in 1964: I had to re-read this to fully understand the sentence, because it is not clear which rooms the dates are attached to until you reach the end of the sentence. ", 1958," could be referring to the building of the Roberts Center or the McElroy Commons.

Link "board of regents"

  • That article does not really describe the same thing as is meant by board of regents here. It is a specific meaning used briefly at Jesuit universities in the mid-20th century. Ergo Sum 21:30, 2 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I think "legal entity" should be linked, so the reader can go to that article if they want to understand the implications of that change.

Fordham University

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Fordham was in the midst of a financial crisis: Is it possible to give financial figures before and after his tenure, to avoid pushing a narrative? As is done with "Student enrollment also increased from 10,000 to 14,000".

members of Students for a Democratic Society took over and occupied Walsh's office: Do we know what their motivations were?

denied tenure to a young, controversial professor: What was so controversial about him?

but students [still] went on strike for days: Clearer

Later years

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Link "Harriman College"?

The last paragraph is unfinished.

Legacy

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Link "Bioethics"

Sources Magenta clockclock

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Health/formatting checkY

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Reliability checkY

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Two history books published by universities, supplemented by news and university websites. All seem reliable.

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[1a, b, c]: checkY

[4a, b]: checkY

[6]: checkY

[7]: checkY

[16]: checkY

[28]: Source only mentions one security guard getting injured, not plural. Also, it includes page 299.

[32]: checkY

Scope checkY

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Copyvio checkY

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Earwig gives 25.9% and doesn't highlight any too close paraphrases. I found no too close paraphrases during the spot check.

Stable checkY

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Media checkY

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Captions checkY

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@It is a wonderful world: Thank you for your review. I have addressed all of your comments. Ergo Sum 21:41, 2 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@Ergo Sum I am happy with all changes and justifications, except one minor point I responded to at the top. It is a wonderful world (talk) 11:11, 4 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]