Pegasus Bridge (video game) was one of the Video games good articles, but it has been removed from the list. There are suggestions below for improving the article to meet the good article criteria. Once these issues have been addressed, the article can be renominated. Editors may also seek a reassessment of the decision if they believe there was a mistake.
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Grabbing this article for a review as I love reading about older video games! Will have comments up in a couple days. Aoba47 (talk) 05:21, 8 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Remove the comma after Second World War as it is unnecessary. You can either do that or separate the sentence into two if you feel that it is running too long.
Be more specific about the reception. This is just the lead, but it should give the reader a clear understanding of the rest of the article. What about the graphics was praised? What was the major bug (did it block progress? crash the game? alter the graphics?) Since it is the lead, again it does not have to be too in-depth, but clarification is required.
I've specified what was praised about the graphics and the bug in both the lead and reception section. It's just that I've been told in numerous reviews to leave the objectives out of the reception part of the lead, but I prefer to include them anyway, so I'm happy to add them JAGUAR15:47, 8 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Is there a reason why you did not put Strategic Wargames as the series in the infobox?
Restructure the following sentence as it reads awkwardly ("At the beginning of the game, the British 6th Airborne Division have not yet made their parachute drops, thus no British units appear on the map, regardless of the side chosen.") You can use something like "Regardless of the side chosen, British units will not appear on the map at the beginning of the game. This is because the British 6th Airborne Division have not yet made their parachute drops." This is just a suggestion, but the sentence needs some work.
Clarify "remote corners." Are you referring to "remote corners" of the map screen? Are they distributed to "remote corners" at random? Make sure the meaning is clar.
Reword the last sentence as it reads awkwardly. You can do something like the following "While British forces can destroy various bridges during the game, certain bridges Caen Canal and Orne river must be preserved in order to win the game." This is just a suggestion, but the sentence is very choppy as it is awkwardly split in half by the transition "however" so it needs minor work.
Clarify the meaning of this sentence (" Some games of the series were met with controversy upon release, such as Theatre Europe.") Why were some of the games met with controversy? Also, how does this connect with Pegasus Bridge?
Again, clarifying the "major bug". The quote from Owen Bishop is excellent and should be kept, but I am still not entirely certain what the "major bug" is referring to.
Restructure the following sentence as it reads awkwardly " However, Irving praised its graphics and historical accuracy, stating that it was "attractive" and clearly based on the historical situation, although it was "unatmospheric". The final bit about the atmosphere seems tacked on and could be more clearly integrated in the sentence (you could use it as a contrast with her quote about the game being "attractive").
I am very impressed with the research put into this page! While this is not required for GAN, I would highly encourage you to archive all the resources when doable to avoid dead/broken links in the future.
I've archived all of the webpages, however the magazine scans couldn't be archived. It's safe to say the Internet Archive will never fall, so I think that should be fine JAGUAR15:47, 8 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
@Jaguar: This is a very strong article and a very interesting read. There are just some areas that need to be revised for clarify and flow/sentence structure, but other than that, it should be a quick and easy pass once all my comments are addressed. I am impressed especially since this was added and edited so quickly. Great work! Aoba47 (talk) 06:39, 8 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
@Aoba47: thank you for the review! Yeah, I enjoy writing these old 80s games as surprisingly, they're the most well covered because of all the scans people have uploaded to the internet over the years. And the ZX Spectrum had a huge following back in the 80s, so games released for that system are well documented (except on Wikipedia, which is what I'm trying to do). I believe I've addressed everything. I've archived all of the refs except the scans, as sadly they can't be archived. I think it should be fine though. Thanks again for the quick review. JAGUAR15:47, 8 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
@Jaguar: Great work! Good luck with your future work on video game articles. I look forward to it. Thank you for your quick responses to my comments. ✓Pass
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