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Reviewer: Alexandra IDV (talk · contribs) 05:44, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
I will review this.--AlexandraIDV 05:44, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
Serious Sam Advance (also marketed as Serious Sam) is a 2004 first-person shooter game
Global Star Software announced the game in January 2004 and released it for the Game Boy Advance in April.and tweaking the first sentence into
[...] developed by Climax London and published by Global Star Software for the Game Boy Advance.
Advance received a mixed reception,- does a game receive reception? At best it sounds repetitive, and I would recommend changing into something like "received mixed reviews".
from a mission to 2113's Abu Simbel, Egypt- "Abu Simbel in 2113". Additionally, time travel has not been mentioned yet, so I would recommend writing something like "from a time-travel mission" for clarity.
the ancient Rome of 512 BCE- as above, "Ancient Rome in 512 BCE" is clearer
Serious Sam Advance was developed by Climax Group through its Climax London studio.[5][6] The studio was composed of former developers from the defunct company Crawfish Interactive, and the team employed a game engine utilising ray casting to simulate 3D computer graphics on the Game Boy Advance, a technique Crawfish Interactive had pioneered for the platform.- There is no logical connection between "the studio was composed of ex-crawfish staff" and "the team used ray-casting", making it feel very strange to present the facts like this in a single sentence. I would connect the crawfish stuff with the first sentence instead - something like "by Climax Grou's studio Climax London, which was composed of former staff from the defunct company Crawfish Interactive."
Take-Two Interactive confirmed the games anew in March.- what does this mean?
Global Star Software announced on 14 April 2004 that it had shipped both games for their respective platforms for the North American market.is a roundabout and indirect way of phrasing it - the announcement isn't important, the release is. Try something like "Global Star Software released Serious Sam Advance in North America on 14 April 2004, simultaneously with Serious Sam: Next Encounter."
Serious Sam Advance received "mixed or average reviews", according to review aggregator website Metacritic, which calculated a normalised rating of 51/100 based on nine critic reviews.- lots of data that doesn't mean anything to the layperson reader we should be writing for, especially when the MC score already exists in the review table. I would simplify this to "Serious Sam Advance received mixed reviews according to the review aggregator Metacritic."
@IceWelder: A few issues, but none that seem too major. I have put this review on hold for seven days - ping me when you have addressed the issues above or if you have any questions.--AlexandraIDV 06:49, 29 October 2020 (UTC)