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Nominator: ZKang123 (talk · contribs) 11:44, 29 July 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Rollinginhisgrave (talk · contribs) 13:31, 31 July 2024 (UTC)
Finished with this, looking forward to your responses. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 10:10, 4 August 2024 (UTC)
I'll be reviewing this article soon. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 13:31, 31 July 2024 (UTC)
Thanks for your hard work on this, looking forward to reviewing it. I'll be dropping in concerns/questions here as I go. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 14:00, 31 July 2024 (UTC)
I don't like the layout. Calling a section history, when the rest of it essentially history feels misleading. Items like the 2001 renovation are spread across the page, duplicating content and reducing readability. I would suggest restricting the architecture to a description of the current architecture, and moving discussions of history into the History section. Tell me if you disagree. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 15:50, 2 August 2024 (UTC)
When initially constructed, the building included administrative and secretarial rooms, meeting halls, canteens, a reception hall and a lounge.[9] At the centre of the building is the concourse which serves as an assembly area,[6] and can be used for hosting exhibitions or events held before or after the concert.[11] The atrium was naturally ventilated until it was enclosed and air-conditioned following the 2001 renovation.
At the centre of the building is the concourse->
The building was built around the concourse...to preserve the past tense, as the previous sentence and next sentence both are descriptions of the building historically. Tell me if you think it flows better. In the meantime I will continue with the review. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 07:04, 4 August 2024 (UTC)
Designed in a modernist styleThis can all be implied by applying modernist as an adjective to an article.
The SCH houses the Singapore Chinese Orchestra (SCO), and the concert hall has a capacity of 831 people.awkward link between clauses.
00055C pt TS 30could you explain why this should be included without an explanation of its parts?
the building measuresuse metric as the base for Singapore.
serving as an expression of local identityinappropriate inclusion for this section, if it's to be included.
Provisions on the roofwhat are provisions on the roof?
At the centre of the building is the concourse which serves as an assembly area,[6] and can be used for hosting exhibitions or events held before or after the concert.move this out of history section.
reception roomswhat are these?
The auditorium has a sloped raked section and a flat sectionbut the original didn't? Reading from previous sentence.
specially positioned such that its-> specifically positioned so its
such a "sop"reword in prose
Inche Mohamed Alwi from the Alliance party... even after the merger.This paragraph should be reworded in a summary rather than a play by play ("he said, then he said")
announced in October that the conference hallgenerally avoid this type of writing. I know that this is what happens when you're using contemporary sources, so you get the announcements, but you can just say it was delayed because of (attributed) X and opened in YYYY.
The Trade Union House and Singapore Conference Hall hosted significant eventshas hosted?
This would allow the SCO to hold rehearsals and performances at the SCH.redundant
Eulogising The General, Panoramic South, Fisherman's Story and Legend Of Narcissusare these famous songs?
under the Preservation of Monuments Order 2010unnecessary, merge following sentence into this one (i.e. on xxx 2010 became first post-colonial building to become a national monument.) Reword quote into prose.
A few expressed confusionspecify
expressed "no reaction".I don't know what this means. His was expressionless? He said "no comment" or something? Did he comment but unemotively?
and that it could indicate more focus on the urgent preservationI'm not sure what you're trying to say here.
inclusive orchestragender? race?
Thanks for taking these photos, they really added a lot.
Spot check:
However, due to the building's "complicated nature", the Ministry of National Development announced in October that the conference hall would only be completed by February of the following year.
In 1996, Goh announced that the government would provide NTUC a S$320 million grant for its new office building in Raffles Quay, which would also house the Singapore Labour Foundation, NTUC Income and other NTUC organisations.second and third sources are unnecessary
Sean Lim wrote in a 2017 commentary that the SCH "represented the hospitable face of the nation" as it hosted various foreign dignitaries such as Indian prime minister Indira Gandhi.make clear this is referring to the past.
The exhibition hall at the lower ground
At the entrance, a sign displays "Dewan Persidangan Singapura" – the Malay name of the building.
and has its own toiletsI don't feel great about this being the entire description of the contents of the VIP lounge. Cut or add.
While acknowledging that the SCHMOS:SAID
In a 1991 May Day speech...avoid repeating NTUC in this sentence
Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 14:00, 31 July 2024 (UTC)