- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Z1720 (talk) 02:27, 23 May 2021 (UTC)
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22 vs. Earth
- ... that Pixar released the short film 22 vs. Earth, which takes place before the events of Soul, on Disney+ in 2021? Source: IndieWire, GeekTyrant
- ALT1:... that the character 22 from the Pixar film Soul starred in her own short film, 22 vs. Earth, in 2021? Sources per ALT0
- ALT2:... that the character 22 from the Pixar film Soul was featured in her own short film, 22 vs. Earth? Sources per ALT0
ALT3:... that the Pixar short film 22 vs. Earth reveals why 22 did not want to go to Earth in Soul?ALT4:... that in the Pixar short film 22 vs. Earth, a prequel to Soul, 22 forms a rebel alliance to stop souls from going to Earth?Sources per ALT0ALT5:... that the Pixar short film 22 vs. Earth features the character 22 from Soul as she forms a rebel alliance to stop souls from going to Earth?Sources per ALT0- ALT6:... that the Pixar short film 22 vs. Earth, a prequel to Soul, was directed by Kevin Nolting, who edited Soul ? Source: IndieWire
ALT6a:... that the Pixar short film 22 vs. Earth was directed by Kevin Nolting, the editor of its prequel Soul ?Source per ALT6- ALT6b: ... that Kevin Nolting, the editor of Pixar's Soul, directed its prequel short film 22 vs. Earth? Source per ALT6
- Reviewed: Danish Civil War
Created/expanded by Songwaters (talk). Self-nominated at 22:23, 1 May 2021 (UTC).
Query: Article is new enough, long enough, neutral, fairly well cited, and free of copyvio (The Movie Outlet appears to have plagiarized from this article). QPQ verified. Hooks are formatted and not too long. However, I don't find the hooks particularly interesting, and the article is so short that there isn't a lot of material to work with. (I wouldn't mind seeing the article expanded a bit with some higher quality sources, if that can be done in a timely manner – Whatsondisneyplus.com describes itself as an "unofficial fan site".) ALT0 almost looks like an advertisement (product A, which is associated with acclaimed B, can be purchased at C). ALT1 is more suitable though I feel it could use a rephrase – perhaps 'featured' instead of 'starred' and remove the year? Perhaps an additional hook could be developed from the plot, which makes up the bulk of the article? – Reidgreg (talk) 18:02, 17 May 2021 (UTC)- @Reidgreg: I've added four new hooks and expanded the article.
- The expansion and its source look good. ALT4 and 5 are sourced in the lead of the article. ALT3 isn't sourced in the article but if it's okay with you I'll strike it rather than asking for changes. I changed "spin off" to "prequel" in ALT4 to avoid "off of".
Approve ALT0, ALT1, ALT2, ALT4, ALT5. – Reidgreg (talk) 16:35, 19 May 2021 (UTC)- @Reidgreg: Thanks for the approval. I've also added a non-plot-based hook after reading the response to your question on Wikipedia talk:Did you know#Plot-based hooks. Songwaters (talk) 19:18, 19 May 2021 (UTC)
- Thanks, that's my bad for suggesting plots, which are discouraged per this supplemental rule
H11: If the subject is a work of fiction or a fictional character, the hook must involve the real world in some way.I've struck ALT4 and 5. ALT6 looks good. I've moved the citation up per WP:DYKDN. I've also put up a slight rewording as ALT6a. Since this is just a copy edit (and since I've gotten some advice on this) I think it's fine without another reviewer. So, to sum up: - Approve ALT0, ALT1, ALT2, ALT6,
ALT6a. – Reidgreg (talk) 19:34, 19 May 2021 (UTC)- @Reidgreg: Thanks again. However, ALT6a states that Soul is the prequel to 22 vs. Earth, when the truth is the other way around. 22 vs. Earth takes place before the events of Soul. Songwaters (talk) 19:39, 19 May 2021 (UTC)
Facepalm . Dang, you're right! There ought to be a way to tighten up the prose while still mentioning Soul and its relationship to the subject. I tried flipping it around as 6b. Is that okay? – Reidgreg (talk) 20:41, 19 May 2021 (UTC)
- @Reidgreg: Looks great. Thanks again! Songwaters (talk) 21:17, 19 May 2021 (UTC)
- @Reidgreg: Thanks again. However, ALT6a states that Soul is the prequel to 22 vs. Earth, when the truth is the other way around. 22 vs. Earth takes place before the events of Soul. Songwaters (talk) 19:39, 19 May 2021 (UTC)
