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Christian Albright, De'Montre Tuggle
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... that professional football players Christian Albright and De'Montre Tuggle were both born on March 29, 1999, were both named second-team all-Mid-American Conference in 2020, were both waived by the Chicago Bears in August 2022, and both made their Canadian Football League debuts in 2023?
- ALT1: ... that Christian Albright and De'Montre Tuggle were both born on March 29, 1999, both named second-team all-MAC in 2020, both waived by the Chicago Bears in 2022, and both made their CFL debuts in 2023?
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Created by WikiOriginal-9 (talk).
Number of QPQs required: 0. Nominator has less than 5 past nominations.
~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 14:15, 30 August 2024 (UTC).
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| Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation |
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Overall: 
Note that this review is for both of the articles; Where's the hook source? Good enough. 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 14:29, 30 August 2024 (UTC)
- Sources added. The birthdates and CFL debut years are at the CFL profiles, and the other sources are self-explanatory. Thanks for the quick review. ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 14:41, 30 August 2024 (UTC)
@WikiOriginal-9 and TheNuggeteer: the hook is far too long per WP:DYK200; please suggest a shortened alternative. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 12:02, 25 September 2024 (UTC)- ☛ Offering to review alternative hooks, if the original reviewer has to step back for a bit. Rjjiii (talk) 22:38, 28 September 2024 (UTC)
- The hooks also probably need rewriting since they may not make as much sense to international readers who may be less familiar with American or Canadian football. Maybe BeanieFan11 can help with wordsmithing? Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 23:47, 2 October 2024 (UTC)
- Maybe something like: ... that Christian Albright and De'Montre Tuggle were both born on March 29, 1999, named second-team all-Mid-American Conference in 2020, both members of the Chicago Bears in 2022, and both debuted in the CFL in 2023? There's a limited amount of space so explaining everything might not be possible. BeanieFan11 (talk) 01:50, 3 October 2024 (UTC)
- I actually wonder if it's even necessary to mention the full date since the main point about them being born on the same day would still make sense otherwise, but I'll leave that to the review. To clarify: according to WP:DYK200, multi-article hooks are exempt from the strict reading of the rule and are allowed to go above 200 words. However, if I remove one name from the hook, it would still be around 195 characters, which is on the long side and thus not ideal. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 02:14, 3 October 2024 (UTC)
- Maybe something like: ... that Christian Albright and De'Montre Tuggle were both born on March 29, 1999, named second-team all-Mid-American Conference in 2020, both members of the Chicago Bears in 2022, and both debuted in the CFL in 2023? There's a limited amount of space so explaining everything might not be possible. BeanieFan11 (talk) 01:50, 3 October 2024 (UTC)
- The hooks also probably need rewriting since they may not make as much sense to international readers who may be less familiar with American or Canadian football. Maybe BeanieFan11 can help with wordsmithing? Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 23:47, 2 October 2024 (UTC)
New reviewer needed since TheNuggeteer has been topic banned from DYK, among other processes. Struck original, too-long hook; here's a slightly cut-down version of BeanieFan11's hook above as ALT2:
- ALT2: ... that both Christian Albright and De'Montre Tuggle were born on the same day, named second-team all-Mid-American Conference in 2020, signed with the Chicago Bears in 2022, and debuted in the CFL in 2023? (185 prose characters excluding the second bold link per DYK rules; ALT1 above is 183 prose characters with the same exclusion) —BlueMoonset (talk) 02:44, 7 October 2024 (UTC)
Long enough, new enough, no plagiarism, and everything is cited. Both articles are mostly hard facts with no NPOV issues. The bits of the hook fact can be verified by the sources cited in both articles. Approving ALT2 for a hook. It reads a lot smoother than the original wording. Looks good, Rjjiii (talk) 03:18, 7 October 2024 (UTC)
- ALT2: ... that both Christian Albright and De'Montre Tuggle were born on the same day, named second-team all-Mid-American Conference in 2020, signed with the Chicago Bears in 2022, and debuted in the CFL in 2023? (185 prose characters excluding the second bold link per DYK rules; ALT1 above is 183 prose characters with the same exclusion) —BlueMoonset (talk) 02:44, 7 October 2024 (UTC)
