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Elin Falk
- ... that Elin Falk revolutionised the teaching of gymnastics in Swedish schools in the early twentieth century?
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MumphingSquirrel (talk) 21:01, 17 October 2024 (UTC).
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- Edits needed, article in wikivoice praises the subject at various points - Free of copyright violations, plagiarism, and close paraphrasing:
- Other problems: - Use of primary sources might be an issue
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- Interesting: - discuss, please offer an ALT or two
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Great to see this article. I have questions about the choice and use of some sources. I think these can all be corrected, and some discussion may be beneficial. ProfGray (talk) 19:45, 13 November 2024 (UTC)
- Hook: "revolutionised" seems laudatory and afaik that word is not in the source; "reform" is used and seems more NPOV. Would help to have a hook that says something about the reforms, such as from a military to a more playful style. Or about how the reforms were met with anger and condemnation.
- Posture not mentioned in source cited, but perhaps "correcting body position" is meant?
- Primary sources are at current footnotes #1, #4. And #7 is by the subject herself. #2 unclear. Second opinion would be helpful here.
- Source #5 links to a WP article IINM, seems to need correction.
- It'd be helpful to find more independent sources about her.
- Overly praising POV includes: "Like so many innovative thinkers, Falk met opposition in her lifetime, with full recognition and appreciation," "Newspapers became involved, publishing condemnation of the exercises without having read about them, let alone tried them" (i.e., critical of her critics), praising: "was as critical of herself as of others, jetisoning any of her ideas which did not work as she had hoped," ProfGray (talk) 20:11, 13 November 2024 (UTC)
- @MumphingSquirrel: Please address the above.--Launchballer 12:21, 22 November 2024 (UTC)
Hi, I've been gradually working through the points above, editied the text and linked #5 to where it should have gone. Added a number of academic references. Alternative hook below. Let me know if you think anything further needs to be done. Thanks for helful pointers. ALT1: ... that Elin Falk caused a national controversy in 1913 with her suggestions for reforming how gymnastics was taught in Swedish schools? MumphingSquirrel (talk) 18:49, 24 November 2024 (UTC)