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Dear Alpha Quadrant - Thanks again for your assistance. I edited http://en.wikipedia.orgview_html.php?sq=Qlik&lang=&q=Wikipedia_talk:Articles_for_creation/Earth%27s_Birthday_Project after reading http://en.wikipedia.orgview_html.php?sq=Qlik&lang=&q=Wikipedia:NPOV. I removed adjectives or clauses that might have bias or make a strong statement. I also looked for ways to attribute statements. If there are additional areas that need more neutrality, please let me know specifically. It will be helpful for future articles to understand this policy from a senior editor's POV. I did not resubmit the article yet after seeing your note to fellow reviewers. Thank you. jonsweaver. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jonsweaver (talk • contribs) 17:31, 4 January 2011 (UTC)
- Ok, I have done another review. There are still some sentences that need rewording. For example:
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Observing the metamorphosis of a butterfly in approx. 21 days is an amazing experience and it is rare to find a wild caterpillar that successfully continues its life cycle.
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This is an opinion, as this should be written in an encyclopedic tone the article should be free of opinions. Opinions may be stated if they are from a reliable source, but they must be referenced and it must be clear that it is an opinion. I hope that helps. You have a very good start, after the tone is adjusted the article will be a good encyclopedia entry. You have some good references. Alpha Quadrant talk 17:46, 4 January 2011 (UTC)
