Comments from Littlecarmen
- "1995 low-budget independent comedy-drama film Living in Oblivion" You can remove the "film". The "comedy-drama" makes it obvious to the reader that you're talking about a film.
- Removed "film". - AffeL (talk) 17:33, 21 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- "He was nominated at the 10th Screen Actors Guild Awards for Outstanding Performance by a Male Actor in a Leading Role for starring in the critically acclaimed comedy-drama The Station Agent (2003)" This is really long. You can just say that he was nominated for his performance in that film, you don't need to spell out the full title of the category (this goes for the rest of the lead as well). Maybe mention that he played the lead role.
- I rephrased it. - AffeL (talk) 17:33, 21 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- "For starring in the critically acclaimed comedy-drama The Station Agent (2003), in which he played a quiet, withdrawn unmarried man. Dinklage received a nomination for the Screen Actors Guild Award for Outstanding Performance by a Male Actor in a Leading Role and he also garnered a Best Ensemble nomination for the same role." This is still very long and there shouldn't be a period there.
- I trimmed it. - AffeL (talk) 09:55, 22 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- "Chicago Film Critics Association Awards for Most Promising Performer and Online Film Critics Society for Best Breakthrough Performance. He was also awarded the New York Film Critics Circle for Online Award for Breakthrough Performance." You need to rephrase these because they don't make a lot of sense right now.
- I rephrased it. - AffeL (talk) 17:33, 21 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- "The role earned him nominations for the Chicago Film Critics Association Awards and Online Film Critics Society. He also won the New York Film Critics Circle for the film." He didn't receive nominations for a society or a circle. You need to rephrase this.
- What do you mean?, Online Film Critics Society and New York Film Critics Circle are what these award shows are called. I added "award" at the end of both "society" and "circle", so that it's clear. - AffeL (talk) 09:55, 22 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- It still doesn't really make sense since there isn't just one Chicago Film Critics Association Award, Online Film Critics Society Award or Satellite Award. They're ceremonies that give out lots of different awards. Littlecarmen (talk) 18:14, 23 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- "He and the rest of the cast were nominated for Screen Actors Guild Awards for Outstanding Performance by an Ensemble in a Drama Series" Awards → Award
- Done. - AffeL (talk) 17:33, 21 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Then you need to add a "the" before the title of the award. Littlecarmen (talk) 03:55, 22 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Done. - AffeL (talk) 09:55, 22 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Empire Awards and Golden Globe Awrads sections: "Dinklage has received one award from one nomination." You can remove the "from one nomination."
- Done. - AffeL (talk) 17:33, 21 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- "The Gold Derby Awards are awarded annually for the best of television and film." This should be reworded.
- Done. - AffeL (talk) 17:33, 21 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- "The Independent Spirit Awards are presented annually by Film Independent, to award best in the independent film community." You can remove the comma.
- Done. - AffeL (talk) 17:33, 21 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- I also think you should reword "to award best in the independent film community." Littlecarmen (talk) 03:55, 22 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Done. - AffeL (talk) 09:55, 22 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- IGN Awards and IGN People's Choice Awards sections: Worthy? I think you should rephrase this.
- Done. - AffeL (talk) 17:33, 21 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- recognise → recognize
- Fixed. - AffeL (talk) 09:55, 22 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- MTV Movie & TV Awards: The references don't need a break between them.
- Fixed. - AffeL (talk) 17:33, 21 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- New York Film Critics Circle: It would be interesting to know which achievements they honour instead of when the ceremony takes place. "Dinklage has won the award once." → "Dinklage has received one award" (to be consistent"
- Done, added what they honor. - AffeL (talk) 17:33, 21 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Online Film Critics Society: "Dinklage has been nominated once." → "Dinklage has received one nomination."
- Done. - AffeL (talk) 17:33, 21 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- "The Portal Awards are awarded annually to genre television and film every year." This is redundant.
- Removed "every year". - AffeL (talk) 17:33, 21 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- "The Primetime Emmy Award are presented" Award → Awards
- Done. - AffeL (talk) 17:33, 21 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- "The Television Critics Association Awards are awards" This is obvious.
- Fixed. - AffeL (talk) 17:33, 21 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- "First awarded in 1995, the awards" Change "the awards" to "they". "Dinklage has been nominated eleven times." → "Dinklage has received eleven nominations."
- Done. - AffeL (talk) 17:33, 21 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- @Littlecarmen: All done, changed so that magazines/websites are only linked the very first time. - AffeL (talk) 17:33, 21 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- You haven't added publishers. For example, The New York Times is published by Arthur Ochs Sulzberger, Jr., Daily Express is published by Northern and Shell Media, etc. Littlecarmen (talk) 03:55, 22 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Added publishers for those I could find. @Littlecarmen: How does it look now? - AffeL (talk) 09:55, 22 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
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