Wikipedia:Featured list candidates/Featured log/December 2008

Comment

• The term "sporting experts" is vague. Are they sport writers, broadcasters, players or other coaches?
  • done BBC says over 30 leading sporting experts from a selection of newspaper sports editors (national and regional) and magazines., so I refined it to "sporting journalists". Rambo's Revenge (talk) 15:06, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
• The second column is missing a heading
  • Question Other recent FL's don't do this - e.g. List of UEFA Intertoto Cup winning managers. It is really an extension of the winner column, but with an additional way of sorting. Rambo's Revenge (talk) 15:06, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    • I still think this column needs a heading—Chris! _ct 19:57, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
      • I have added a heading by way of a note. I did not add a title in the strict sense as it forces the flag column of the table to be a lot wider than is desirable. If you still don't feel that the title is satisfactory please let me know. Rambo's Revenge (talk) 20:37, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
        • I just went ahead and fix it myself. I combine the nationality column with the winner column. I also set the width of the rationale column. You can reset these changes if you want.—Chris! _ct 00:44, 22 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
          • Thats great, I had to fix the sorting, but other than that I am happy with those changes you made. Rambo's Revenge (talk) 10:24, 22 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
• Shouldn't Rugby Union/Rugby League be just Rugby since the column is "Sport"?
  • not done Rugby Union and Rugby League are different sports. From Rugby football "Rugby League and Rugby Union are the only two sports referred to as "Rugby" today". They are seperate just like association football and American football are seperate. Rambo's Revenge (talk) 15:06, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    • Ok—Chris! _ct 19:57, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
• Heading of the 5th column: "Coach of" -> "Team"
  • Question. Not sure. Joe Calzaghe is not srictly a team, but an individual hence "Coach of". Would you disagree? Rambo's Revenge (talk) 15:06, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    • Ok—Chris! _ct 19:57, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
• Align center all ref links in the "Note" column
  • done Rambo's Revenge (talk) 15:06, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
• Rearrange position of the images so that items in the table won't be forced into two rows
  • not done even if the images are removed completely the table is still forced on to two rows (on my 1400×1050 px resolution at least). Rambo's Revenge (talk) 15:06, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

—Chris! _ct 01:14, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments - Although it's short, it looks pretty good. I just found some minor things that can be further improved.

• "Each panelist votes for their top two choices, their first preferences is awarded two points, and their second preferences is awarded one point." First, change the first comma to a semi-colon. Also, both uses of "preferences" should be singular. done
• Comma after Arsene Wenger. done
• "with five of the other six winners being European." This is a "noun-plus-ing" structure, which I'd like to see changed to "and five of the other six winners were European." done
• "so the then St Helens captain Paul Sculthorpe, collected on his behalf." Either add another comma after captain, or remove the one after Sculthorpe. done
• There are specific links for the 2006 rugby competitions that can be used to replace the general links. They are Challenge Cup 2006, Super League XI, and 2006 Super League Grand Final. Also could have links for the 2000 rowers and the 2003 Rugby World Cup Final. done

Giants2008 (17-14) 17:30, 22 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

All done. Rambo's Revenge (talk) 18:51, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Dabomb87 (talk · contribs)

• "The BBC Sports Personality of the Year Coach Award is an award given annually, as part of the BBC Sports Personality of the Year ceremony each December." No comma necessary. done
• "The award was introduced in 1999, and first presented to Alex Ferguson."-->The first recipient of the award was Alex Ferguson, in 1999. done
• "doing so in 2002 and 2004."-->having done so in 2002 and 2004. done
• "Britains"-->Britons. done
• "southern hemisphere" Should be capitalized. done
• "In 2007, Enzo Calzaghe was the first recipient of the award who had coached an individual, and not a team." Second comma not needed. done
• "collected on his behalf."-->collected it on his behalf. done
• Where is the source for the nationality and sport of the winners? Dabomb87 (talk) 19:08, 25 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Comment. I have added a cite for the sports. I don't think it is needed for the nationality as they are something easily verifiable. If you disagree I'm sure I could find citations unrelated to SPoTY that cite individuals nationality. IMO this is excessive if but you really think they are necessary let me know. Rambo's Revenge (talk) 19:00, 28 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    • What determines the "nationality" of the winner? Is it where they were born or where they reside? All your other fixes look good. Dabomb87 (talk) 22:06, 28 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
      • I consider nationality by Jus soli, and think this is the main usage of the term. Do I need to make this explicit? Rambo's Revenge (talk) 23:42, 28 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
        • Probably, especially considering the issue with Enzo Calzaghe below. Dabomb87 (talk) 14:23, 29 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
          • Done Rambo's Revenge (talk) 14:32, 29 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by -- SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24_[c]

• I don't get how the "By nationality" section is useful for this article.
  • Comment. I have seen these sections in other FL's. e.g. this and its topic members. I think it is useful to show that although SPoTY is to do with British sport, it is not prominently won by Britons, unlike (for example) the main award. Rambo's Revenge (talk) 19:40, 28 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
• The "By sport" section also isn't useful, as the main table is sortable.
  • Comment. Similar to above, these sections seem to be common. The section helps show any possible bias towards sports. Sortable is ok whilst the number of awards is small (currently here), but will become useful as there are more award winners (as in the main award). Rambo's Revenge (talk) 19:40, 28 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
• I believe more than half the readers are American, so could you replace Football with Association football?
  • done I have changed the first "football" in the lead to "association football". The table instances of "football" are all wikilinked to Association football already. Rambo's Revenge (talk) 19:40, 28 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
• "Another football manager" Tell the readers that Alex Ferguson was a football manager first, then do the next sentence.
  • done
• "...the only man..." Couldn't women win this award?
  • done, good spot.
• "Britains" --> "British". They are British people, not Britains.
  • done Already changed to "Britons" per Dabomb87 above.
• St Helens --> St Helens RLFC as some readers may not understand.
  • done
• "...coaching the British Olympic cycling team to eight gold medals at the Beijing Olympics."

• Beijing Olympics can be mistaken some several reasons. Wikilink it to 2008 Summer Olympics.
  • done It already was, but I have skipped the redirect.
• Needs a reference.
  • Comment It already is. Per WP:LEADCITE, when the lead is summarising information in the body of the article (ref 21) they can be omitted to "avoid redundant citations in the lead". Rambo's Revenge (talk) 19:40, 28 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• I don't see how the references cite the rationales, since they aren't in the section of the Coach of the Year, but elsewhere on the article.

• Comment. I don't quite understand. The rationale have direct references e.g. This is a BBC article which includes why Anderson won the award - "The former New Zealand coach earned the award for guiding the team to Challenge Cup, minor Premiership and Grand Final triumph." The note section references the winners in a non-primary source. Rambo's Revenge (talk) 19:40, 28 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• The problem here seems to be that the rationales are direct quotes from the section for Team of the Year, not Coach of the Year. Are the Coach of the Year always with the Team of the Year, or is it divided separately? -- _{signed by} SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24 _{spell my name backwards at} 22:15, 28 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• The rationales are from Coach of the Year where possible, e.g. ref 17 There is not always a seperate page for each of the awards so sometimes they are from a combined page e.g. ref 21 covers a British cycing double of Team & Coach awards. Othertimes reasons are given in a summary on an overall Sports Personality page e.g. ref 5 which says "the coach who guided Redgrave, Matthew Pinsent, Tim Foster and James Cracknell to their coxless fours gold, received the Coach of the Year accolade." They don't come from any team of the year page, they just come from whatever page BBC seem to give the rationale on. Rambo's Revenge (talk) 23:31, 28 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

-- _{signed by} SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24 _{spell my name backwards at} 07:23, 28 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Weak Oppose - its been awhile since this type of list wast at FLC, needs a few fixes

• This list of tallest buildings in Vancouver ranks skyscrapers in the Canadian city of Vancouver, British Columbia by height. - FLs are discouraged to begin with "This is a list of ____"
  • Done reworded lead sentence. Cheers. _{Trance addict - Armin van Buuren - Oceanlab} 18:40, 19 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
• The tallest building in Vancouver is the 62-story, 201 metres (659 ft) Living Shangri-La. - it would be better if the comma was replaced with and
  • Done Cheers. _{Trance addict - Armin van Buuren - Oceanlab} 05:58, 19 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
• The second-tallest building in the city is One Wall Centre, at 48 stories and standing 150 m (492 ft) tall. - how about The second-tallest building in the city is One Wall Centre, standing at 150 m (492 ft) tall with 48 stories. or The second-tallest building in the city is One Wall Centre, containing 48 stories at 150 m (492 ft) tall.
  • Done Cheers. _{Trance addict - Armin van Buuren - Oceanlab} 06:00, 19 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
• The skyscraper has the distinction of being the first building in the world to use a tuned liquid column damper to control wind vibrations. - you introduced 2 skyscrapers in the intro, which one are you referring to here?
  • Done Cheers. _{Trance addict - Armin van Buuren - Oceanlab} 05:59, 19 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
• A ten year lull in building construction came after the boom. However, beginning in 1991 and continuing into the present, Vancouver went on a second, much larger building boom. ---> A ten year lull in building construction came after the boom, however, beginning in 1991, and continuing into the present, Vancouver went on a larger second building boom.
  • Done Cheers. _{Trance addict - Armin van Buuren - Oceanlab} 06:05, 19 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
• In the notes: This building is also known as the[46] Hyatt Regency Hotel. - what is ref 46 verifying?
  • Done Whoops, this was a misplaced footnote. Moved it to the correct spot. Cheers. _{Trance addict - Armin van Buuren - Oceanlab} 06:02, 19 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
• For the proposed, approved, under construction section, you should use the current month, current day, current year templates in the prose to verify as of when the status is to date.
  • Done Cheers. _{Trance addict - Armin van Buuren - Oceanlab} 06:47, 19 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
• In the note section, the note should have a bullet.
  • Done Cheers. _{Trance addict - Armin van Buuren - Oceanlab} 06:03, 19 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
• I don't like how only 2 publishing sources are used: Emporis and Skyscraperpage, there needs to be more variation in the sourcing.--SRX 21:26, 18 December 2008 (UTC)

• Followup
  • I striked my oppose, but I still don't like how only 2 publishing sources is verifying the whole list. I recommend using official websites of the buildings or other sites, like in other FL's. I.e. List of tallest buildings in Baltimore or List of tallest buildings in Washington, D.C..--SRX 23:39, 19 December 2008 (UTC)

I found two references from the city of Vancouver. Cheers. _{Trance addict - Armin van Buuren - Oceanlab} 02:53, 20 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

But you didn't use them in the list, I don't see them used in the references.--SRX 16:21, 20 December 2008 (UTC)

Done, added references to sources other than Emporis and SkyscraperPage (I wasn't done yet when I left the above message). Cheers. _{Trance addict - Armin van Buuren - Oceanlab} 02:04, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Dabomb87 (talk · contribs)

• "The Canadian city of Vancouver contains the tallest buildings of British Columbia. " Seems a bit too artificial to me. Why not a couple general sentences that establishes notability and context: "Vancouver is the largest city in British Columbia, Canada. It has [insert number of buildings over 100 m] buildings over 100 metres (328 ft)."
  • Done Cheers. _{Trance addict - Armin van Buuren - Oceanlab} 17:27, 22 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
• "The hotel, standing at 111 m (364 ft) tall, is the first building to exceed 100 m (328 ft) in the city."-->The hotel, standing at 111 m (364 ft) tall, was the first building to have stood taller than 100 m (328 ft) in the city.
  • Done Cheers. _{Trance addict - Armin van Buuren - Oceanlab} 17:29, 22 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
• "A ten year lull" Hyphenate "ten year".
  • Done Cheers. _{Trance addict - Armin van Buuren - Oceanlab} 17:29, 22 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
• "Vancouver went on a larger second building boom."-->Vancouver experienced a larger second building boom.
  • Done Cheers. _{Trance addict - Armin van Buuren - Oceanlab} 17:32, 22 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
• "Vancouver also saw the completion of One Wall Centre and Living Shangri-La, the city's first building to break 150 m (492 ft) and 200 m (656 ft) mark, respectively."-->"Vancouver also saw the completion of One Wall Centre and Living Shangri-La, the city's first buildings to break the 150 m (492 ft) and 200 m (656 ft) marks, respectively.
  • Done Cheers. _{Trance addict - Armin van Buuren - Oceanlab} 17:33, 22 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
• "Vancouvers' "-->Vancouver's.
  • Done Cheers. _{Trance addict - Armin van Buuren - Oceanlab} 17:34, 22 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
• "As of December 2008, there are 597 highrise buildings in Vancouver." Shouldn't "highrise" be hyphenated? You might want to define that for this list, high-rise buildings are those that stand taller than 100 metres (328 ft).
  • Done Cheers. _{Trance addict - Armin van Buuren - Oceanlab} 17:37, 22 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
• "The tallest development taking place in Vancouver is the Ritz-Carlton Vancouver."-->The tallest development that is under construction in Vancouver is the Ritz-Carlton Vancouver.
  • Done Cheers. _{Trance addict - Armin van Buuren - Oceanlab} 17:38, 22 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
• What do the equal signs in the Rank column signify? Dabomb87 (talk) 04:18, 22 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Two or more buildings that have the same height are equal in ranking in these tallest buildings lists. Cheers. _{Trance addict - Armin van Buuren - Oceanlab} 17:41, 22 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

*According to Emporis.com, you are missing some buildings.

The other buildings were not over 100m, but rounded up to 100m. -- _{signed by} SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24 _{spell my name backwards at} 10:56, 30 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• "It has 41 buildings..." --> "Vancouver has 41 buildings..."

DONE -- _{signed by} SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24 _{spell my name backwards at} 10:56, 30 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• In the Dominion Building image, the caption, "The Dominon Building was the tallest building in the British Empire upon its completion." needs a reference.

DONE -- _{signed by} SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24 _{spell my name backwards at} 10:56, 30 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• "Vancouver witnessed its first building boom." first building boom? please be more specific.

Changed to expansion. -- _{signed by} SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24 _{spell my name backwards at} 10:56, 30 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• Is the word boom appropriate for its using?

I really don't know how to answer my own question, but I replaced it with expansion. -- _{signed by} SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24 _{spell my name backwards at} 10:56, 30 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• Is there a reference for the note?

Removed. -- _{signed by} SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24 _{spell my name backwards at} 10:56, 30 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• Overall, nice article. -- _{signed by} SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24 _{spell my name backwards at} 04:05, 28 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comment I think this nom should continue since the topic of this list is very important. As for the grammar issue, I think have died is more correct.

• • William Henry Harrison shouldn't be link the second time

Done --Mr.crabby (Talk) 23:18, 16 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• • "assassinated" in the lead and the table should link to appropriate articles

Done --Mr.crabby (Talk) 23:18, 16 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• • Remove the president assassination links from see also because of the above (just keep Curse of Tippecanoe and List of United States presidential assassination attempts)

Done --Mr.crabby (Talk) 23:18, 16 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• • Link the years in the table to different elections

Done --Mr.crabby (Talk) 23:18, 16 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

—Chris! _ct 06:41, 16 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Dabomb87 (talk · contribs)

• "Of those eight, four were assassinated, while four died of natural causes." "while"-->and.

Done --Mr.crabby (Talk) 15:17, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• "In all eight cases, the Vice President of the United States took over the office of presidency, as part of the United States presidential line of succession." No comma necessary.

Done --Mr.crabby (Talk) 15:17, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• This image caption: "A picture depicting the assassination of Abraham Lincoln." 1) No period needed, 2)"depicting"-->that depicts.

Done --Mr.crabby (Talk) 15:17, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• "On the contrary, Franklin Delano Roosevelt held the office of presidency longer than any else to die while serving"-->Franklin Delano Roosevelt held the office of presidency longer than any other president who died while serving.

Done --Mr.crabby (Talk) 15:17, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• "William Henry Harrison was the first president to die while in office, when he caught pneumonia and died on April 4, 1841." First comma not necessary.

Done --Mr.crabby (Talk) 15:17, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• "The most recent president to die while in office was John F. Kennedy, who was assassinated on November 22, 1963." This sentence is repeated in more detail in the next paragraph. Delete this instance of the sentence.

Deleted --Mr.crabby (Talk) 15:17, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• Add a note that says that each year is linked to an article about the US presidential election for that year. Dabomb87 (talk) 15:57, 20 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Where shouold I add it? --Mr.crabby (Talk) 15:17, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

A separate "Footnotes" section (See List of New Jersey Nets head coaches for an example). Dabomb87 (talk) 15:45, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Added footnotes section --Mr.crabby (Talk) 17:39, 22 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

• The Baltimore franchise began its life as the Milwaukee Brewers (not to be confused with the current National League team of the same name) in 1901. - life sounds awkward, how about began operation as the Milwaukee Brewers or just began as the...

• Done. This was taken from the Twins managers list, but I like this wording better. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 17:41, 15 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• The Browns remained in Missouri until the end of the 1953 season, when Major League Baseball's owners elected to move the franchise to Baltimore, Maryland, where they were renamed the Orioles, after Maryland's state bird. - in the first sentence of the lead, add an acronym to the Major League Baseball (MLB) so in this sentence it can just be stated as MLB's

• I dislike using abbreviations unless they are needed many times. In this case, there is no reason to shorten it, especially because it helps the prose to flow rather than breaking it with an abbreviation. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 17:41, 15 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• Weaver, Hank Bauer, and Joe Altobelli are the managers who have won a World Series championship with the club: - how about adding only before managers

• I did remove the word "only" when I was rewriting this, so I have re-added it. Done. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 17:41, 15 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• including Frank Robinson,[10] the first African-American manager in Major League Baseball, - if my suggestion is taken, you only need to state the acronym, MLB

• See above.

• In the key, the column headings should be in bold since the tables column headings are in bold.

• Missed that, thanks. Done. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 17:41, 15 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• In some of the coaches, there are more than 4 references in the little ref column. Is it necessary to link to the source about the post season games? Does it tell anything else that the profile of the coach doesn't, if not, it should be removed because it makes the table less appealing, a criteria of FLs.

• They do serve a purpose, because the general manager references do not provide records for playoff appearances. The only way that I can find to do this while still using a reliable source is by linking each series that the manager... well, managed... in the playoffs. To facilitate a proper table width, I did break up the references at every two. To change the visual aspect of the row height, it could go every three. Let me know your opinion. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 17:41, 15 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

--SRX 00:20, 15 December 2008 (UTC)

I think expanding it for three refs in each would do better IMO, 2 just makes the row expand too much. Other comments check out alright.--SRX 21:57, 15 December 2008 (UTC)

• Done. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 23:07, 15 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Dabomb87 (talk · contribs)

• "In its 108-year history"-->In its 108-year-long history...

• This is grammatically incorrect. In addition, the addition of "long" is redundant, which is discouraged. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 23:35, 19 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• You are probably right, I was a bit hurried in reviewing this. Dabomb87 (talk) 14:51, 20 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• "Seven managers have taken the Orioles franchise to the postseason, with Earl Weaver leading the team to a record six playoff appearances. " The with + -ing sentence structure is ungrammatical.

• I can't find anything about it being correct or incorrect. Can you elaborate? I have a correction in mind, but I don't know that it needs to be changed. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 23:35, 19 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• See User:Tony1/Advanced editing exercises#A common problem—noun plus -ing. Dabomb87 (talk) 14:51, 20 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• Got it. Done. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 17:23, 20 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• Add a note about each year being linked to an MLB season. Dabomb87 (talk) 22:55, 19 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• When did this become part of FL criteria? I see this everywhere, and I find it unnecessary per WP:CONTEXT#Dates. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 23:35, 19 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

All sports lists that have been promoted in the past few months have used this method. At the Date Linking RfC, it has been agreed that those type of hidden year links should be explained in the key. Alternatively, you could rename the column header "Orioles season". Dabomb87 (talk) 14:51, 20 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Done. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 17:23, 20 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

• I think there still is the discussion on MOS about the year being linked to something else rather than the actual year itself. I suggest you not wikilink it.

• It's shown in the key what those mean. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 14:48, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• I meant in the prose. -- SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24_[c] 21:49, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• Ah. I don't agree with the RfC, but I'll change it for now. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 22:38, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• "After one season in Wisconsin..." Some readers may not know Milwaukee is in Wisconsin.

• I know, that's why I said it. It was already specifically defined that they were in Milwaukee, so now they know that Milwaukee is in Wisconsin. Saying "Milwaukee" twice is redundant. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 14:48, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• Hey, some readers may be confused... -- SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24_[c] 21:49, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• Clarified. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 22:38, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• In the second paragraph, there are sentences that some readers, mostly outside of the US, are confused about. Some readers may not know that St. Louis is south of Milwaukee.

• And I explicitly said that they moved south to St. Louis. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 14:48, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• "Earl Weaver led the team to a record six playoff appearances." team or MLB record?

• Team record. Fixed. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 14:48, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• postseason should be spelled post-season.

• There's no convention or consensus on this, but fixed anyway. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 14:48, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• does "won" really need to be wikilinked?

• It's linked to a relevant article, Win (baseball). KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 14:48, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• But in the article, I think it is only explaining about the Win column for pitchers, not for the team itself. -- SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24_[c] 21:49, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• Whoops. Fixed. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 22:38, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• "The longest-tenured general manager is Roland Hemond, who served in the position for eight years, from 1987 to 1995." what has this got to do with the article?

• Oops, I removed the GM table. Deleted. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 14:48, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• "...(1968–1982, 1985–1986)..." That is in a prose, so it should be like "(1968 to 1982, 1985 to 1986)"

• There's no comparative text (i.e., the word "from") to force using the word "to"; within parentheses, the dash is acceptable. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 14:48, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• I hope you're right, since I'm not that educated in grammar. -- SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24_[c] 21:49, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• "...including Frank Robinson,[10] the first African-American manager in Major League Baseball,[11] and Rogers Hornsby, who was a member of the cross-city rival Cardinals during the franchise's tenure in St. Louis." Why are you only including those two in the prose? I suggest you delete that part.

• I included them because there were notable facts about them that were worth mentioning. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 14:48, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• There is no reference about them being notable. This was a problem on my second featured list, Wikipedia:Featured list candidates/List of Los Angeles Lakers first and second round draft picks/archive2. -- SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24_[c] 21:49, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• There are references in this sentence. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 23:32, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• I meant is there a reference of them being more notable than the other managers? -- SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24_[c] 23:51, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• Hmm. Interesting. I would say that the criteria for inclusion within an article are less stringent than the criteria for inclusion within the 'Pedia, and I would additionally argue that these two managers are more notable than the others for this particular article because of the reasons I listed. I would say that Frank Robinson's first in MLB feat makes him more notable than Hornsby for the purposes of this article and have provided a reference for that, and I believed as such when I wrote it; however, I didn't want to just have one name there. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 01:27, 24 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• I'm just going to reply with what Matthewedwards said to me on my second FLC nomination, "Surely every player picked is notable?" So this is what I'm going to say, "Surely every manager is notable, so why not include all of them?" I will ask Matthewedwards about this minor problem. -- _{signed by} SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24 _{spell my name backwards on} 01:32, 24 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• My issue at the Lakers list was that there was a sentence, "Many notable first round draft picks from the Lakers include <list of a few names>." and I was asking what makes these ones more notable than the others that weren't mentioned in the sentence because there was nothing to show that they were more notable. In this page, it explains that Robinson was the first black manager, and that Hornsby played for the franchise's rival local team. I think the sentence could be slightly restructured though. Without the refs, "Eight Orioles managers have been elected to HoF, including Frank Robinson, the first African-American manager in Major League Baseball, and Rogers Hornsby" could be read as though the first African American manager is not Robinson, and is discussing three people. Matthewedwards (talk • contribs • email) 04:15, 24 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• Made a minor change to clarify this. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 13:58, 24 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• I still think that you should remove that part of the sentence, but I just want to get this over with. :D -- _{signed by} SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24 _{spell my name backwards on} 22:47, 24 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• You use postseason in the prose, but you use playoffs in the key. Choose one or the other.

• Fixed. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 14:48, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• "Number retired by the Baltimore Orioles franchise" There isn't a reference for the retired numbers.

• Fixed. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 14:48, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• Why not include the managers who spent their entire MLB managing career with the Orioles?

• Because it would require excessive color-coding or addition of symbols and would detract from the visual appeal of the table. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 14:48, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• How would it detract the visual appeal of the table? -- SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24_[c] 21:49, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• Because of the addition of more colors and symbols, and because this list is so much longer than many. I've never felt it necessary to explicate this particular fact, especially because the chance of a manager leading only 1 team is so much higher in baseball. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 13:58, 24 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• Check for redirects in the article, as I just clicked on some redirects.

• Redirects are OK per WP:R#NOTBROKEN. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 14:48, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• But they should have been wikilinked to the original article, but this doesn't matter. -- SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24_[c] 23:51, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• There isn't a category for Category:Baltimore Orioles lists. Also, Category:Baltimore Orioles is a super category of Category:Baltimore Orioles managers.

• Done. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 14:48, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• Add the navbox template, Template:MLB managers by team.

• Done. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 14:48, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

-- SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24_[c] 07:35, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• Since this is a article about only managers, I suggest you only list the Baseball Hall of Famers who have been elected as a manager. Just look at this list.

• I have seen the list, but I believe that it is important to list all Hall of Famers who have managed a team, since being a member is inherently a notable fact. As I said, this is modeled on the two above FLs, which list all of the managers in the Hall of Fame, for playing or leading. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 14:48, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• I guess you're right, but if you look at my potential featured list, List of Montreal Canadiens head coaches, you'll see that I noted them, but I didn't highlight them in background color and symbols. -- SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24_[c] 21:49, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• In response to this, I do feel that it is necessary to note that the lead is intended to be a summary of the article, or in this case, list; therefore, no information should be provided in the lead that isn't covered or explained in later detail within the list. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 01:39, 24 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• Can you at least note which managers were inducted as a manager and which ones were inducted as a player? -- _{signed by} SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24 _{spell my name backwards on} 22:37, 24 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• The table doesn't note it, so it shouldn't be written in the lead. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 03:12, 25 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• Will you could just note it on the table. -- _{signed by} SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24 _{spell my name backwards on} 03:26, 25 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• I don't see that it makes a difference. Hall of Famers are Hall of Famers. It's one building, one honor, one place. That's why I don't differentiate. Anyone who has made a big enough impact on the game to be inducted is honored equally. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 12:57, 25 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• Like I said before, this is a manager list, and should include information related to the managers, so it's actually good to point out which ones were inducted into the HoF. -- _{signed by} SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24 _{spell my name backwards on} 23:21, 25 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• And... I did. Any person who managed this franchise who was inducted into the Hall of fame is noted as such. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 21:11, 26 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• I meant as a manager. LOL. Also, can you reply to the above comment please, thanks. -- _{signed by} SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24 _{spell my name backwards on} 22:32, 26 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• ←Which one, the others seem resolved. As to this current issue, there's no policy-based reason why this needs to change. I think that this is a difference of opinion about what's necessary for inclusion in this article, and I think we probably need a neutral party. I will request one or two of the members of WP:BASEBALL to take a look. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 22:37, 26 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Asked for two project members' opinions: Baseball Bugs and Blackngold29. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 22:43, 26 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Hmm, this is tricky. I can see both sides of the argument and can't say that I really have a clear-cut conclusion. Does anyone know how many of the managers elected were in fact elected for their managerial roles? If all eight were elected as players then it would make sense to note that, but as it stands now I (though notably as a baseball fan and familiar that players and mangers can both be elected to the HOF) don't find the designation misleading to the extent that it prevents the list from meeting the FL criteria. Don't get me wrong, close scrutiny like this is exactly what should happen to FLCs, and it could probably improve the list, but I don't see it as vital. blackngold29 23:24, 26 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• Per concerns here, I have made a few minor changes to indicate differences between players and managers, though I believe no distinction is necessary. If this method of identification is unacceptable, then I will revert to the earlier version. Because there is no distinction whatsoever between inductees to the Hall (you are in or you are out), these shouldn't be separated by color or other large differences, so I have tried to keep the distinction as subtle as possible. Please comment. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 21:43, 28 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• "The duties of the team manager include team strategy and leadership on and off the field." reference?

• This is drawn directly from the Wikipedia article Manager (baseball). KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 14:48, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• But is it referenced? Also, drawing sentences directly from a Wikipedia article doesn't mean the sentence is true. -- SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24_[c] 21:49, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• I'm aware of that, but this wasn't a problem on any other FL noms. I know that's not an excuse, but why is it an issue now? Otherwise, do you have a reference for that, because I can't find one. It's certainly just common sense. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 22:38, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Would this reference be available? It's got some information as to the duties of the manager, but only abstractly touches on my two points. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 22:43, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I don't think it'll work. It's common sense to most of the Americas, but not in Europe, Asia, or other countries not familiar with the sport. Though I recommend you remove that part of the sentence, I won't worry about it too much. -- SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24_[c] 23:00, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

There still needs to be a reference for the definition of a manager. Just put a dictionary reference there, as there is none. -- _{signed by} SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24 _{spell my name backwards at} 21:52, 28 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• Done. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 00:46, 29 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• "...they managed the team while still being signed as a player." reference?

• See List of Philadelphia Phillies managers and List of Minnesota Twins managers; it's just defining the term for people who don't know what a player-manager is. The wikilink is there but it's just an additional definition. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 14:48, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• I still don't see the point in putting it on the article though, since like you said, you already wikilinked it. -- SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24_[c] 21:49, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• It was requested in a previous FL nom, so I included it. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 22:38, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• I suggest you just remove it, since it's not relating to the article. -- SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24_[c] 23:00, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• It certainly does relate to the article. It's an important part of the history of the game that player-managers existed in the game, as no one with a passing interest today would know since they don't exist anymore. Many of the edits that you ask me to make involve clarifying things in the article; with this edit, you are asking me to make something less clear. I see no logic in removing it. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 23:32, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• Ok. That was a bad explanation. It certainly does relate to the article, but you don't have to put the description of player-manager onto the article. The readers can easily click the wikilink of it. -- SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24_[c] 23:51, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• As far as possible, we should try to keep the reader in the article they are reading. The perfect article should be nearly self-contained, readers should not have to branch out to find out information needed to understand the article's subject matter. Dabomb87 (talk) 23:57, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• Earl Weaver is the only Orioles manager to have been elected into the HoF in the Managers category. KV5, the comment from Dabomb87, which states, "As far as possible, we should try to keep the reader in the article they are reading. The perfect article should be nearly self-contained, readers should not have to branch out to find out information needed to understand the article's subject matter." You are currently branching out information about what a manager is, and what a player-manager is. -- _{signed by} SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24 _{spell my name backwards on} 23:37, 26 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• This is my opinion: If knowledge of what a player-manager is vital to readers' understanding of the article, then having a short description of the job/position in the article is fine. Dabomb87 (talk) 00:20, 27 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• ←SRE.K.A.L.24, I believe you have misread or misunderstood this comment. As I read it, Dabomb87 is saying that not including this information induces people to click on the link, which is not the goal of the "perfect" or featured article/list. I will ask him to confirm. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 23:43, 26 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• It's alright, I am watching this FLC. I am saying that if readers need to know what a player-manager means to understand the list, then a short explanation in the lead is necessary in addition to the link. Dabomb87 (talk) 16:47, 28 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• As long as you put a reference from a dictionary reference, I will be fine with it. -- _{signed by} SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24 _{spell my name backwards at} 21:52, 28 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• There are no dictionary references for this, but I went to Baseball-Reference's Bullpen and found the stub there on player-managers. I noted the book that was used as a reference for further reading, found it on Google Books, and it verifies the information. Done. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 00:46, 29 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• The book reference needs to show the ISBN-10. -- _{signed by} SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24 _{spell my name backwards at} 01:12, 29 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• Ugh. This is why I don't cite books. I have no idea what that is. I think I found it though. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 01:18, 29 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• In the table in row 29, the references are currently in this order: [9][42][43][44][7][45][46][47][48][49][50]. References should be in numerical order, so put the [7] in front of the [9].

• This has come up before (see here under "Resolved comments from The Rambling Man") and, actually, the references don't have to appear in numerical order (they don't have to in a featured article), and there's nothing in MOS to support it. The current setup keeps the references for the postseason in chronological order by postseason series so that they are easily accessible for the reader to see the records.

• In row 30, it is currently in this order: [51][52][8]. Same problem as above.

• See above.

• For ref 2, the publisher is actually MLB Advanced Media, L.P. and the work is MLB.com. Same thing for refs 4 and 13.

• Done with a minor change to state explicitly that these come from the Orioles site, not the MLB main site. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 15:00, 28 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• In the "External links" section, put a bullet (*) before the external link.

• Done. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 15:00, 28 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

— RyanCross @ 00:29, 28 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

• This album became the first to peak at number one on three diferent calendar years (1995 – 1997); while a best-of collection by the late singer, entitled Siempre Selena, also reached the first spot of the chart for two weeks. - split the sentences, they are not related in anyway and makes it confusing when read.
  • Fixed! Jaespinoza (talk) 23:41, 11 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
• The self-titled debut album by Enrique Iglesias also hit the top spot of the chart for 11 weeks and won the Grammy Award for Best Latin Pop Album over albums recorded by singers José Feliciano, Vikki Carr, Marco Antonio Solís and Luis Miguel,[2] who also peaked at number one for the second time on his career with Nada Es Igual.... - hit-->reached, and remove the other names minus Luis Miguel because they make the second part of the sentence confusing.--SRX 22:06, 11 December 2008 (UTC)
  • Fixed! Jaespinoza (talk) 23:41, 11 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comment

• Move "All figures correct as of 2 November 2008" down to the top of the table. It seems out of place.
• Since the key section is short, remove section heading for the key and move it to the top of the table.

Otherwise, good—Chris! _ct 02:04, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Cheers for the comments Chris I've addressed them all. NapHit (talk) 21:12, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Dabomb87 (talk · contribs)

• "open wheeled"—Should be hyphenated.
• "The F1 world championship season consists of a series of races, known as Grands Prix, held usually on purpose-built circuits, and in a few cases on closed city streets, the most famous of which is the Monaco Grand Prix in Monte Carlo." Split this sentence up.
• "The F1 world championship season consists of a series of races, known as Grands Prix, held usually on purpose-built circuits, and in a few cases on closed city streets, the most famous of which is the Monaco Grand Prix in Monte Carlo.
• "World Championships"—Do you mean World Champions?

No, but I think I've made the sentence clearer. NapHit (talk) 20:54, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• "Michael Schumacher holds the record for the most Grand Prix victories, winning 91 times during his career."-->Michael Schumacher holds the record for the most Grand Prix victories, having won 91 times during his career.
• "longest gap"-->longest time gap or longest time between.
• "He won his first"-->He won his first Grand Prix...
• "a gap which spans 14 years 1 month and 1 day."-->a gap that spans 14 years, 1 month, and 1 day. (use non-breaking spaces please)
• "Luigi Fagioli is the oldest winner of a Formula One Grand Prix, he was 53 years, 22 days old when he won the 1951 French Grand Prix."-->Luigi Fagioli is the oldest winner of a Formula One Grand Prix; he was 53 years and 22 days old when he won the 1951 French Grand Prix. (use non breaking spaces here also)
• "All figures correct as of 2 November 2008" Move this phrase to the "By driver" section.
• Change the header "Active" to "Seasons active".
• This image caption is unclear: "Jacques Villeneuve, son of Gilles, who won 11 Grands Prix during his Formula One career" Did Jacques win 11 Grands Prix or did Gilles win them. Dabomb87 (talk) 17:05, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments - I peer-reviewed this, and I must say that it's looking excellent. I only have a couple of minor suggestions.

• There is room for a couple more pictures on the right of the table. Good pictures are avaliable on the pages of Kimi Räikkönen, David Coulthard, and Mario Andretti, among others.

Added image of Andretti, can't get any more on now I'm afraid. NapHit (talk) 16:53, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• Are you sure that references 26 (Whatever Happened to Carlos Reutemann) and 65 (Whatever Happened to Patrick Tambay? are from the AP? I don't see any indication of this in the articles. Then again, I haven't read the newspaper versions so I can't say for sure.

The original article will have been published by the Indpendent which is published by Associated Press so I think it's right. NapHit (talk) 16:49, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

That's all from me; I like the page very much otherwise. Giants2008 (17-14) 03:07, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Cheers Giants I've addressed all concerns. NapHit (talk) 16:53, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comment - it is way better than the previous FLC, the only thing is that I would like to see the lead expanded by adding more about Audioslave itself: ie. memebers, how the formation came about.--SRX 21:22, 17 December 2008 (UTC)

Done, and what is "memebers", a Gremlins dialect?=P Cannibaloki 00:15, 18 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Eh, "members." In addition, I would merge the intro sentence with the 1st paragraph of the lead, it is less appealing like it is now.--SRX 01:18, 18 December 2008 (UTC)

Done! Cannibaloki 01:28, 18 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Dabomb87 (talk · contribs)

• "Several vocalists jammed with the three, until the producer Rick Rubin suggested that they jam with former Soundgarden vocalist, Chris Cornell." What does "jam" mean here?
  • Nothing.
• "The quartet then, began working"
  • Done.
• "After tossing around the idea of being called "Civilian"" "tossing around"-->considering.
  • Done.
• Why are there See also links to the Rage against the Machine and Soundgarden discographies? Dabomb87 (talk) 16:40, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • SPAM! Cannibaloki 17:35, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• By the beginning of he next year Cliff Burton had replaced Ron, and soon after, Mustane was kicked out due to his alcohol abuse and was replaced in April by Kirk Hammett. The band formed of Ulrich, Hetfield, Burton, and Hammett released three albums, Kill 'Em All (1983), Ride the Lightning (1984), and Master of Puppets (1986), the latter also being their first gold certified album by the RIAA.

The band formed of Ulrich, Hetfield, Burton, and Hammett (redundant!) released three albums

This is a list of band members, not of albums, and their certicications.

• In September 1986 Cliff Burton died in a car accident, and in his memory, the remaining three members decided to continue and hired Jason Newsted as bass guitarist

"and in his memory" - where did you find that? they just kept the band working.

• Under the new format, the band continued to be highly successful, releasing Ride the Lightning (1988), Metallica (1991), Load (1996) and ReLoad (1997) and being certified 15x platinum by the RIAA.

"releasing Ride the Lightning", wasn't that one already released?

"and being certified 15x platinum by the RIAA.", that was the album Metallica. When you read this sentence it looks like Load was the one theat recieved the certification.

The list makes more reference to the albums than the members.

Take a look at other featured band members lists. The lead still needs lots of work. This should be withdrawn, fixed up, and the re-submited. Rockk3r Spit it Out!

Please take a look again. Nergaal (talk) 09:09, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

The list's been imrpoved, but still some more work.

• There're 5 paragraphs, could you put # 3 and 4 together?
• "Ulrich was rushed to hospital with a unknown illness, and was unable to perform." - with an unknown...
• " went on to release three albums and received its first gold certification by the Recording Industry Association of America." - is it really that imprtant that they recieved a gold certif by the RIAA. If so, the the black album would be more important. I don't finbd that sentence substancial enough.
• " For the next show, Ulrich was replaced by Slayer drummer Dave Lombardo," - Why "For the nexst show", what was the previous show? It also sounds like those members were hired as permanet members, and they just helped out on the show.
  • Tried to make it sound better now. How is it? Nergaal (talk) 21:46, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
• Jason's "Release contributions: The $5.98 E.P.: Garage Days Re-Revisited (1987), …And Justice for All (1988), Metallica (1991), Live Shit: Binge & Purge (1993), Load (1996), ReLoad (1997), Garage Inc. (1998), S&M (1999)" - change it to: "Release contributions: all Metallica releases from The $5.98 E.P.: Garage Days Re-Revisited (1987) to S&M (1999). Makes it shorter and tells tehe same information.
• I know it's true, but is there any citation to reference Bob Rock's contribution to St. Anger?
• "Band members decided to kick Mustaine out of the band " - "Mustaine was kicked out of the band..."
• Not necessary, but could you upload a picture of Newsted? Flickr is a good site to find free images.
  • Actually there doesn't seem to be any free good ones [11]. Nergaal (talk) 21:46, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    • Unless you think this is worth uploading. Nergaal (talk) 21:50, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
• "By March 1982, when Metallica played its first live show, Ron McGovney had been recruited to play bass guitar." It's unnecesary. Read it now and tell me it doesn't sound better?

Thats's all for now...  Rockk3r Spit it Out! 20:51, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose - not a quick fail, but in this list's nature, it has few items to comply with WP:WIAFL.SRX 21:19, 17 December 2008 (UTC)

10 is too few? Nergaal (talk) 09:09, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I also thought I saw nine.

• Early that year, Ulrich posted an advertisement in a Los Angeles newspaper which lead to James Hetfield being recruited to sing and play rhythm guitar. - led not lead
• After a second advertisement Dave Mustaine was hired as a lead guitarist. By March 1982, when Metallica played its first live show, Ron McGovney had been recruited to play bass guitar. - comma after advertisement
• In the fall of 1982, Ulrich and Hetfield attended a show which featured bassist Cliff Burton and the two were "blown away" by Burton's use of a wah-wah pedal and asked him to join Metallica. - comma before each and
• Exodus guitarist Kirk Hammett flew in to replace Mustaine the same afternoon and Metallica played its first show with Hammett in April 1983. that not the and comma before and
• Under this format, the band went on to release three albums and receive its first gold certification by the RIAA. - received not receive
• In September 1986 Cliff Burton died in a car accident, which left Metallica's future in doubt. - comma after 1986, in addition, is the exact date not available?
• However, Hetfield returned to play in December the same year. - its not grammatically correct to start a sentence with however, how about Hetfield, however, ...
• Merge either the third and fourth paragraphs or the fourth and fifth, as they are short in length--SRX 15:27, 21 December 2008 (UTC)

Comments fixed. Nergaal (talk) 20:23, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Dabomb87 (talk · contribs)

• Why the infobox? It doesn't have any information that isn't already said in the lead.
• "Ulrich posted an advertisement in a Los Angeles newspaper which lead to James Hetfield being recruited to sing and play rhythm guitar."-->Ulrich posted an advertisement in a Los Angeles newspaper, leading to James Hetfield's being recruited to sing and play rhythm guitar.
• "After a second advertisement" Comma after this phrase.
• "In the fall of 1982, Ulrich and Hetfield attended a show which featured bassist Cliff Burton and the two were "blown away" by Burton's use of a wah-wah pedal and asked him to join Metallica."-->In the fall of 1982, Ulrich and Hetfield attended a show that featured bassist Cliff Burton; the two were "blown away" by Burton's use of a wah-wah pedal and asked him to join Metallica. Also, where is the source for that quotation?
• "Although Burton initially declined the offer, by the end of the year he accepted on the condition the band move to San Francisco."-->Although Burton initially declined the offer, by the end of the year he accepted the invitation on the condition that the band move to San Francisco.
• "Band members decided to kick Mustaine out of the band due to drug and alcohol abuse, and violent behavior."-->Band members decided to kick Mustaine out of the band due to drug and alcohol abuse, as well as violent behavior.
• "by the RIAA." Spell out RIAA on its first appearance.
• "Newsted later joined tha" typo.
• "as the band's future was in doubt." Second time this phrase has been used, use something more descriptive.
• "The band went on to release an album without an official bassist—although the bass guitar was played by the band's producer Bob Rock." Which album?
• "mysterious "-->unknown. Dabomb87 (talk) 16:24, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments fixed. The infobox is present in all the other band members FLs. Nergaal (talk) 20:23, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

• Dick Williams, the only Padres manager to have been elected into the Baseball Hall of Fame[4], is the franchise's all-time leader for the highest playoff winning percentage with .400. - move comma, it should be before the ref.

Fixed -- SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24_[c] 02:52, 17 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• I think there is an extra space before the table of contents.

Someone told me that you shouldn't have spaces between the TOCs. -- SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24_[c] 02:52, 17 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

--SRX 02:35, 17 December 2008 (UTC)

That's what I meant, there is an extra space so it shouldn't be there.--SRX 21:18, 17 December 2008 (UTC)

Then I already fixed it. Laugh out loud. -- SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24_[c] 01:25, 18 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comment

• "Petco Park" should be "PETCO Park" (See their website)

I know it's offically called PETCO Park, but I don't know if WP:MOS will allow. I'll ask Matthewedwards about it. -- SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24_[c] 06:34, 19 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I don't think so, but yeah, it is good to ask someone who is knowledgeable about the MOS. Maybe, you should ask User:Dabomb87, also. He seems to know about these MOS stuff, too.—Chris! _ct 06:42, 19 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I asked Matthewedwards, and he replied on my talk page, saying that PETCO, in PETCO Park can be capitalized, so I capitalized it. -- SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24_[c] 18:43, 19 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• Change the size of the two images next to the table to "upright" since they are affecting items in the "Achievement" column

The images are not affecting the table or the "Achievements" column. Look for yourself, it'll just make a bigger whitespace. -- SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24_[c] 06:34, 19 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Well, "1996 NL Manager of the Year[6]" is forced into 2 rows, which affects the visual appeal of the list.—Chris! _ct 06:42, 19 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

—Chris! _ct 06:15, 19 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I think it is because my resolution is bigger. If you turn your resolution to 1280 x 1024, you'll see what I mean. Should I upright the image, even though it looks perfectly fine on 1280 x 1024, but maybe not on others? -- SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24_[c] 07:14, 19 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I would say do it.—Chris! _ct 19:14, 19 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

DONE -- SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24_[c] 20:44, 19 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Dabomb87 (talk · contribs)

• If it means anything, I also agree that it should be PETCO Park.
• "The team is currently owned by John Moores, and Kevin Towers is their general manager."
• "regular season games managed " hyphenate "regular season".
• "regular season game wins" same here.
• "playoff game wins" hyhenate "playoff game"

• I don't get the reason why you have to hypenate, but as long as it is correct. -- SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24_[c] 21:08, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• Compound modifier.

• "Bob Skinner is the Padres' all-time leader for the highest regular season winning percentage, as he has only managed one game, which he won." To provide more statistical perspective, you might mention which manager has the highest winning percentage and has managed at least 100 games.

• I put the bar to 162 games (1 season). -- SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24_[c] 21:08, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• "Bochy is also the only coach" Are coaches the same as managers?

• In sports, yes, but changed it to managers. -- SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24_[c] 21:08, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Dabomb87 (talk) 15:55, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

DONE all. -- SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24_[c] 21:08, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Killervogel5

• "The team played their home games at Qualcomm Stadium, formerly known as the Jack Murphy Stadium, and before that San Diego Stadium, from 1969 to 2003 before moving to PETCO Park, where they have played since 2004.[1]" - really bad run-on sentence. Suggest "The team played their home games at Qualcomm Stadium (formerly known as San Diego Stadium and Jack Murphy Stadium) from 1969 to 2003. Starting with the 2004 season, they moved to PETCO Park, the Padres' current stadium."

• I reworded the last part. -- SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24_[c] 21:08, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

• "spent their entire managing careers with the Padres.[3] Black" - I would prefer a semicolon to a period here because the sentences are directly related.
• I would like to a see a general reference added to Baseball-Reference's Padres franchise encyclopedia to offset the use of team-dependent sources as general refs, per WP:RS.

• Added -- SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24_[c] 21:08, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Hope this helps. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 17:51, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

DONE all. -- SRE.K.Annoyomous.L.24_[c] 21:08, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]