Wikipedia:Featured list candidates/Featured log/November 2012

• Any lede image?
  • No image available at Commons, sorry.
• "This is regarded as a notable achievement" by who?
  • Done.
• "Ref" missing dot period
  • Column merged into "Result" column.
• Just a suggestion, but I would align references in the table to the center
  • As above. Zia Khan 20:53, 17 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Very nice, mostly solid. TBrandley 17:50, 17 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "In January 1999, he took his first pair of five-wicket hauls in a single match against India at the M.A. Chidambaram Stadium, Chennai. By the end of his career, he had claimed five-wickets hauls in both innings of a match twice." I would consider rephrasing both these sentences, thus: "In January 1999 against India at the M.A. Chidambaram Stadium, Chennai, he took a five-wicket haul in both innings of a Test match for the first time. He repeated this feat only once more in his career, at Feroz Shah Kotla Ground, Delhi during the second Test of the same series."
  • Done. Zia Khan 16:04, 18 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• I'm not particularly happy with the way that "Runs" sorts, if I wanted to know the most runs he'd conceded when he'd got five wickets, this sorting wouldn't be useful. However, I know it is consistent with the other promoted lists.
  • Not sure what can I do here? Zia Khan 16:04, 18 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • No need to do anything. I was just noting my dissatisfaction, I appreciate that this is the convention. Harrias ^talk 16:38, 18 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• Ref #12: "2st Test" needs fixing.
  • Done. Zia Khan 16:04, 18 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• Ref #18: you use a different date format to elsewhere.
  • Done. Zia Khan 16:04, 18 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Other than these minor issues, it's pretty good: you've done plenty of these now, so you know what you're doing. Decent work, well done. Harrias ^talk 14:22, 18 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Ref #3 is a rd, use the actual link

• Done.

• Sentences that start with "In ...", prose looks weak

• Harrias suggested these two setences, see his comment above.

• The succeeding sentence needs a small re-write. Not sure why you're so keen on including the venues every time

• As above.

• Link Hat-trick appropriately, else "one of the four bowlers to achieve an ODI hat-trick" to "List of One Day International cricket hat-tricks"

• Done.

• "on two or more different ocassions" -> on more than two different occasions

• I disagree, only one bowlar has taken more than two hat-tricks. The others did the same twice.

• Ocassion is a typo

• Done.

• Try to merge "One of his hat-tricks came during the 1999 Cricket World Cup" with the previous sentence in some way

• Done.

• the Pakistan

• Removed.

• His last ODI fifer came in the first innings

• Fixed.

• While sorting the Test table by "Date" there is a problem with two Test matches where he took ten-wicket hauls

• Fixed. Zia Khan 20:04, 20 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

—Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 19:23, 20 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "Saqlain was named by the Wisden as one of their Cricketers of the Year in 2000." Remove "the".
• In the Result column of the key, "the" should be removed before Pakistan.
• Maybe this is just my eyes, but I think the five stat rows in the middle of the tables would look better centered.
• Minor, but in the note there should be a comma after Malinga. Giants2008 (Talk) 21:32, 24 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Fixed all. Since all the rows are aligned to left so this should be to the left, for consistency. Zia Khan 04:37, 25 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• " as one of their Cricketers of the Year " don't include "one of" in the link
  • Done. Zia Khan 01:45, 28 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• Test 12, economy claims 1.10 but he conceded 35 runs in 16.4 overs, so the maths doesn't work for me... probably 2.1? Suggest you just check the others.
  • Corrected. Zia Khan 01:45, 28 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

The Rambling Man (talk) 17:49, 27 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Infobox image caption doesn't need a full stop.
• "biographical film about the life of" biographical films generally are about the life of someone, so this phrasing seems a little redundant to me.
• Academy Awards etc refer to make-up without the hyphen.
• "The film was handed four nominations" a shade colloquial.

Otherwise very good. The Rambling Man (talk) 07:55, 21 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for the comments, I've made the appropriate changes. - JuneGloom Talk 16:14, 22 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• % should be wrote out fully as "percent"

• Done. Zac  16:36, 7 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Avoid bold links per WP:CONTEXTLINK, as seen in the table. To do this, add plainrowheaders to the table's coding

• This article is modeled after Latin Grammy Award for Record of the Year, and it was deemed acceptable in its FLC last year. Zac  16:36, 7 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "Ref" is missing a period dot at end

• It isn't. Zac  16:36, 7 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Unlink countries per WP:OVERLINK, and remove flags as per MOS:FLAG

• The WP:OVERLINK has been removed, but the flags will remain. Again, these things were deemed acceptable in this type of list in a previous FLC. Zac  16:36, 7 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Any portals related to the subject to add using {{portal bar}} or {{portal box}}?

• Added one. Zac  16:36, 7 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

TBrandley 15:34, 7 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• if they "contains 51 percent new unreleased material" they should be changed to it, "they contains" is poor grammar.

• Done. Zac (talk) 00:06, 10 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "...are the biggest recipients in this category" what do you mean by this? biggest names? most wins? its unclear. If it is biggest names to win the award, then that is POV and can't be included without a ref

• Fixed the sentence, what it meant was that they recieved the most wins of the category. Zac (talk) 00:06, 10 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• The colour and apostrophe should be in the same cell

• I'm not entirely sure what you mean by this. Zac (talk) 00:06, 10 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Avoid using a semi-colon for bolding, it's a WP:ACCESS concern. Either use headers or the three apostrophes

• Done. Zac (talk) 00:06, 10 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

NapHit (talk) 19:38, 9 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Presumably by "they contain 51 percent" you mean at least 51 percent?

• Done. Zac (talk) 15:51, 11 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "for her eponymous fourth studio album Soraya " if you say its eponymous, you probably don't need to repeat her name!

• Done. Zac (talk) 15:51, 11 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "Gian Marco Zignago and Caetano Veloso have received the most wins in this category, with two each, and they are the only performers to receive more than one accolade" the second part is obvious from the first and doesn't need to be re-stated.

• Done. Zac (talk) 15:51, 11 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• I don't think you need to have [G1] for each entry when you list it as a general reference in any case.

• I'll let Hahc deal with this, as he's the one who put them in that format. Zac (talk) 15:51, 11 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Okay. I will delete the referencing and leave it as a general note below (as it is). — ΛΧΣ21™ 20:19, 11 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• I would expect all awarded albums to be notabl enough to have an article.

• So would I, but they don't. Zac (talk) 15:51, 11 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• So I suspect the albums that won should all be linked, red-linked or otherwise. The Rambling Man (talk) 20:17, 11 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Are redlinks allowed at FLC? If so, I'll add the redlink. — ΛΧΣ21™ 20:19, 11 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Why, yes, of course!! If they're relevant and notable, then they should be linked! (I'm not the "tambling man" by the way!). The Rambling Man (talk) 20:30, 11 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• OMG Sorry! My keyboard makes me write such things sometimes u.u I have added the links :) Anything else to be done? — ΛΧΣ21™ 20:42, 11 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "José Luis Perales" has an accent on Jose.

• Done. Zac (talk) 15:51, 11 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Don't mix date formats in refs.

• Done. Zac (talk) 15:51, 11 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Category has "Category:Latin Grammy Award for Best Singer-Songwriter Album" which uses a capital S for songwriter. This article doesn't. Which is correct? Suggest things are made consistent.

• The article title is correct; I don't have the ability to change category titles. Zac (talk) 15:51, 11 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Yes you do, no special rights required to fix categories. Just create a new category with the correct title and change those articles in the wrong category to the right one. Finally, request the empty category to be deleted. Simple! The Rambling Man (talk) 18:31, 11 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Done. I never thought of that, LOL! Was just saying how the category cannot be moved. Zac (talk) 19:20, 11 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

The Rambling Man (talk) 10:15, 11 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• I may be doing this in the future :) But I guess I am not bound to if we want the list promoted, or do we need to? — ΛΧΣ21™ 18:16, 11 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

  I don't think it's required, but I think it helps. I'm just looking for something to nitpick since this FLC needs more reviewers. :P I'm still looking at the article. Erick (talk) 18:27, 11 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

  Oh haha XD Well, thanks for the review Erick. I appreciate it a lot. — ΛΧΣ21™ 19:02, 11 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Comment Just a brief note, the Latin Grammy Awards are being held today, so you might want to get ready to update the 2012 section soon. Erick (talk) 19:22, 15 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

  I have already updated the section. Regards. — ṞṈ™ 01:56, 18 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

  It needs a disambiguation. It currently links to a Luis Miguel album. Erick (talk) 03:13, 18 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

  I removed the link. I will handle the disambiguation later. Regards. — ṞṈ™ 03:25, 18 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• First of all, I was the one who expanded this list to its current format, you only have to see the "history" section and my DYK credit por that matter, I do not know why I was not asked to nominate this list, since I did all the hard work in the first place.
• I do not see the nominees for the 2012 Latin Grammy Awards, they should be included as I did on my current nomination for Latin Grammy Award for Best Short Form Music Video.
• More comments to come. Jaespinoza (talk) 17:24, 7 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Actually I had to completely rewrite the lead, verify and fix all the sources and make other changes to the overall list, so you can see on the history of the article that I am indeed a major contributor too, so I don't need to ask you to nominate this. On a side note, thank you for reminding me of the 2012 nominees, i will add them today. — ΛΧΣ21™ 17:31, 7 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• I noticed that the 2012 nominees were not arranged correctly, so I fixed that. I have one more comment: Why the name change from "Best Singer-Songwriter Album" to "Best Singer-songwriter Album"? In the Latin Grammy website appears as "Singer-Songwriter". Jaespinoza (talk) 19:20, 14 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Oh, thanks for that :) I appreciate all the help. About the name change, I'll let Zac explain that, as he was the one who performed it. Cheers! — ΛΧΣ21™ 19:23, 14 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• (edit conflict) Why does it matter how it is displayed on their website? An example, an album booklets showing the word "the" in the title "In The End" in caps, but it's done "In the End" on Wikipedia as it's the correct form of titles. Singer-songwriter is one word, not two. It could also be written as Singersongwriter, and you wouldn't write it like SingerSongwriter. The caps are only done for each word; Singer-songwriter is a single word. Zac (talk · contribs) 19:28, 14 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the explanation. Jaespinoza (talk) 00:59, 15 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Further comments:

I think the lead should be updated, since Ricardo Arjona is currently the biggest loser on this category with three unsuccessful nominations (5to Piso, Poquita Ropa and Independiente).

I'm not sure that adding this would give a good impression of the singer unless rerworded like this: "Guatemalan singer Ricardo Arjona has the highest number of nominations without a single win". Is that okay?

What I meant was that this sentence is no longer correct: "Djavan, Jorge Drexler, León Gieco, Ricardo Arjona and Silvio Rodríguez hold the record for the most nominations without a win, with two unsuccessful nominations each." since Arjona has three nominations without a win, I think that "Guatemalan singer Ricardo Arjona has the highest number of nominations without a single win, with three" or something like that could work. Jaespinoza (talk) 02:38, 21 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Okay. Fixed. Thanks :) — ΛΧΣ21™ 03:13, 21 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I have a list currently nominated (for Best Short Form Music Video) and the reviewer asked me to redlink the winners (in case the article does not exist). In the past, when Another Believer started the Grammy WikiProject, we did the articles for all the winners, but it is a lot of work, so I think that redlinking the name of the article would suffice. Jaespinoza (talk) 19:33, 20 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Okay, I will redlink them. — ΛΧΣ21™ 01:43, 21 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your comments. — ΛΧΣ21™ 01:43, 21 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "Shoaib Akhtar, a Pakistani cricketer" since Akhtar has retired from Intn'l cricket, the opeinign phrase needs clarification and a mention of same should be made in the article
  • Fixed.
• Link Imran, Wasim and Waqar, as non-familiar readers may not know about them
  • Done
• I think he was always referred by his last name
  • He is referred by his first name. See here
    • May be, but it's a general practice to use the last name —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 17:18, 28 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
      • I'm sure about that. Zia Khan 17:55, 28 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• "five-wicket hauls takers", this sounds new to me
  • Nothing new, s removed from hauls
• Is mdy the predominant date format used in Pakistan
  • Date format doesn't matter, you can use any of them. I switched to dmy.
    • It does matter! See the above link —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 17:18, 28 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
      • dmy is commonly used in Pakistan. Zia Khan 17:52, 28 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• Alt is confusing. You mean is he wearing the uniform after delivering the ball?
  • Thanks for that. Fixed!
• Is wickets col. the best to define the scope
  • I don't think it's necessary to use since there is not such independently important column in fifers lists —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 17:18, 28 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • Yes, of course wickets column is the best since this is his fifers list.
      • Wickets column is most similar to the fifers. Zia Khan 17:52, 28 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• You have used {{double-dagger}} in the key but used that anywhere in the table, inspite of the fact that Akhtar has claimed two ten wicket hauls
  • Thanks again. Done!
• Correct the caption of the ODI table
  • Corrected.
• No need for a separate column for refs. as there is sufficient space in the result column
  • One can have a separate column in the table. I've merged the columns.
• The "batsmen" col. in the ODI table looks cluttered
  • Widened the column
• How can someone play two ODIs at different venues on the same day
  • My mistake, corrected. Zia Khan 16:27, 28 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

—Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 08:16, 28 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Further comments

• Result for the Pakistan in that match
  • Done.
• A period is the end of everything. Only refs should come after that
  • Done.
• "ten or more wickets per match twice" add something like in his international career at the end
  • Done.
• "Shoaib's first was five-wicket haul was". This sentence needs to be slightly re-written
  • Done.
• "His career-best bowling" add something like figures/performance. Again a re-write is required here
  • Done.
• Abbreviate Twenty20 International
  • Not required because I've used this just 1 time.
• Since both the tables have the same no. of columns, I'd prefer the same width for all columns in both the tables
  • See NapHit's comment, and if you could do something with this?
    • The batsmen column for the ODI table is too small. Use the same values of the Test table —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 20:09, 7 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
      • This value is greater than Test column, check it again. Zia Khan 23:22, 7 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
        • I think you haven't got my point. The column appears to be small because you've used larger values for other columns. Just duplicate the values of the Test table —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 15:49, 10 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
          • I understand you, I changed the values but it doesn't work and the column appears at it was earlier. Hope you understand my point. Zia Khan 23:19, 10 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• When you add "One of two five-wicket hauls by Shoaib in a match" in the table "10 wickets or more taken in the match" is not really needed
  • He took 6 wickets in the 1st innings and 4 wickets in the 2nd against Bangladesh.
    • My bad! I never thought that way —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 20:09, 7 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• Richard Jones is a dab
  • Done.
• In the ODI table, Robbie Hat links to a football referee of the same name
  • Done.
• Franklin was a substitute in the second game
  • I didn't get you. Zia Khan 15:57, 7 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • If you check the scorecard, it was Ian Butler who was dismissed by Akhtar in his second ODI five-wicket haul —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 20:09, 7 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
      • Ok, done. Zia Khan 23:22, 7 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

—Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 06:57, 7 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• I missed out a point in the quote. Since they've used only the first names (I'm talking about Akram, Imran and Waqar), pipelink them accordingly —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 20:09, 7 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Done. Zia Khan 23:22, 7 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Remove references in the images, as I am assuming it is in the article's prose anyway
  • I think the image caption can't be adjusted in the article prose. Many of the reviews will ask for the referece baceause this is a notable fact.
• "described Shoaib as "the fastest bowler in the world"" the shouldn't be inside the quote
  • Done.
• "twelve" should be 12 per WP:MOSNUM in order to be consistent with the rest of the list
  • This is a comparative figure (Shoaib took twelve five-wicket hauls in Test cricket and four in ODIs.)
• Per MOS:DTT, table captions should further explain, like instead of "Key", how about "Key of the table below", and instead "Five-wicket hauls in Test cricket" how about "Five-wicket hauls in Test cricket for Shoaib Akhtar" I'm not saying do those examples, just something like that perhaps
  • Done.
• "Ref" missing dot period
  • the column is merged to result column per Vensatry's suggestion
• Just a suggestion, but I would align references in the table to the center
  • As above
• I've said it before, but I don't think {{cite web}} should be used in external links
  • Why not? If we have a template we should use it, what do you think? Zia Khan 16:27, 28 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

TBrandley 14:19, 28 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "In cricket, a five-wicket haul" no need for In cricket when the previous sentence ends with "international cricket"
  • Done.
• "between 1997 to 2011" that is grammatically incorrect either change between to from
  • Done.
• "the ESPNcricinfo" no need for the to be used
  • Done.
• "natural successor to the legacy of Imran, Wasim and Waqar." use their full names, not everyone knows who they are
  • Done.
• in a match which Pakistan won at the Kingsmead Cricket Ground, Durban
  • Not sure how to do this.Zia Khan 23:20, 29 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • I just wanted those words taking it out, done it myself. NapHit (talk) 15:33, 30 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• I think you should use his surname to refer to him by, not his first name
  • He is known by his first name so I've chosen this and the same was suggested by Harrias when I was working at Waqar's list.
    • Yes just looked at, its not a major issue. It is more common for people to be referred to by their surname, at least in England not sure if it is different elsewhere. I think I remember a discussion a while ago about sorting Indian/Pakistan players by first name rather than last name, so I guess there is a predcent for players to be known by first name rather than last name. In that case I'll leave it be. NapHit (talk) 15:33, 30 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• "took a pair of five-wicket hauls in a single match against New Zealand..."
  • Done.
• "He went on to take ten or more wickets per match on two occasions." -> "Akhtar took ten or more wickets per match twice"
  • Done.
• "Making his One Day International (ODI) debut" example of WP:NOUNING needs revising
  • Done.
• "Shoaib's first ODI five-wicket haul came in 2001 against New Zealand in a match which Pakistan won at the Eden Park, Auckland." -> His first was five-wicket haul was against New Zealand in 2001.
  • Done.
• 'ODI cricket" -> ODIs
  • Done.
• "Shoaib took twelve five-wicket hauls in Test cricket and four in ODIs" I think theses statements should be split and the first one merged with the last sentence in the second para
  • Done.
• "in this format of the game.
  • Done.
• "internatioal cricket" typo
  • Done.
• I don't think mentioning he recorded the fastest delivery in the image caption is relevant. This list is about five-wicket hauls not fastest deliveries
  • Removed.
• As the tables have the same number of columns they should be of equal length for uniformity
  • Done. Zia Khan 23:20, 29 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

NapHit (talk) 17:52, 29 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "ESPNcricinfo described Shoaib as the "fastest bowler in the world" and the "natural successor to the legacy of Imran, Wasim and Waqar"." I think you can do better than an ESPN quote, try The Times, or Wisden or something with some serious cricket gravitas.
  • Done.
• Second para is a bit "stabby" to read, short fact sentence followed by short fact sentence. No real flow.
  • Done.
• Best ODI in table is 6/11 but lead says 6/16.
  • Check it again! It's 6/16. Zia Khan 11:58, 13 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • Aha, I'm mistaken. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:08, 15 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

The Rambling Man (talk) 18:48, 11 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "and an aggressive attitude" quote needs [with] adding before an aggressive attitude as it currently doesn't make sense.
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 16:53, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• and the Wisden Cricketers
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 16:53, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• Not keen on sentences that with "In..." its poor prose, needs revising
  • Made a small c/e —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 16:53, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• Also is there is a source that explicitly states why Hayden was named ICC ODI cricketer of the year? could do with a bit more info than because of his accomplishments with the bat, its a bit ambiguous
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 16:53, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• You need to explicitly state what Lara's record was, not everyone has an intimate knowledge of cricket
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 16:55, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• "Lara subsequently went passed Hayden's total when he scored 400 not out in a match against England in April 2004." -> Lara beat Hayden's total when he scored 400 not out in a match against England in April 2004."
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 16:53, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• 'Making his ODI debut in 1993,[5] Hayden's achieved his first ODI century..." -> "Hayden made his ODI debut in 1993, he achieved his first century..."
  • Done with a slight modification —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 16:53, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• "Hayden's highest score of 181 not out came against New Zealand in 2007" change came to was
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 16:53, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• "at that time" -> at the time
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 16:53, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• "till date" -> to date
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 16:53, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• "making 658 runs" -> with 658 runs
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 16:53, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• "where his highest score remains 73 not out" this suggest he can still beat the total, as he has retired that is not the case, change to his highest score was 73 not out
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 16:53, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• Test column would be more useful, if you state what Test in the series he scored the century. See the Sunil Gavaskar list for instance
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 16:53, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• As we have the same number of columns in both tables, they should be the same width as one another
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 16:53, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• ref 1 the hyphen should be an en dash, likewise the score in ref 15
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 16:53, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• ref 15 also needs the date adding
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 16:53, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

NapHit (talk) 14:43, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• He has scored centuries (100 or more runs) in Test matches and One Day International (ODI) matches → He scored centuries (100 or more runs in a single innings) in Test and One Day International (ODI) matches
• at the Adelaide Oval when he made 125 → scored 125
• His highest score of 380 came against Zimbabwe at Perth in 2003 → for consistency Perth should be "the WACA Ground"
• 400 not out in a match against England in April 2004. → Link England
• He has scored centuries in each innings of a test match on two different occasions. → Test match
• century against India in Visakhapatnam in 2001. → century against India at the Indira Priyadarshini Stadium, in 2001
• Hayden has played nine Twenty20 International (T20I) matches,
• period of over fifteen years → 15
• Key table requires row scopes
• For consistency link Yahoo Cricket, same for BBC Sport
• Ref# 4 needs publisher
• Your are using DMY format in tables while MDY in refeneces, be consistent
• Link not out

Zia Khan 04:05, 21 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Fixed all —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 17:25, 22 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

More–

• and Wisden Cricketers of the year → link it to Wisden Cricketers of the Year
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 08:48, 23 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• each innings of a test match on two different occasions. → Test
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 08:48, 23 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• the Indira Priyadarshini Stadium, Visakhapatnam in 2001.[11] He made ten centuries → comma after Visakhapatnam and 10 in the next sentence
  • Comma shouldn't be there since the sentence is continuous. I've not used numerical notation for ten since this is a comparative figure. —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 08:48, 23 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• Hayden was the leading run scorer in the tournament → run-scorer
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 08:48, 23 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• where his highest score was 73 not out. → something missing there
  • Not quite sure —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 08:48, 23 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Zia Khan 19:31, 22 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "Hayden made his ODI debut in 1993", try to avoid repitition from the previou paragraph → Having made or something...?
  • See NapHit's comment —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 08:48, 23 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • NapHit suggested ('Making his ODI debut in 1993,[5] Hayden's achieved his first ODI century..." -> "Hayden made his ODI debut in 1993, he achieved his first century...") because "1993" is past and doesn't make sence, it should be "Having made his ODI debut"?! Zia Khan 22:24, 23 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
      • Past? I'm not getting you. —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 11:43, 24 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
        • No my mistake but I'm trying to say that "Making his ODI debut in 1993,[5] Hayden's achieved his first ODI century against India at the Indira Priyadarshini Stadium, Visakhapatnam in 2001." doesn't make any sense: it appears to have a dangling modifier, and is in the wrong tense entirely. This isn't an alternative for "Hayden made his ODI debut in 1993" because had not made century in the same match. Not a big deal. Zia Khan 23:02, 24 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Since there are two people in the picture, I would make a note of which side of it is the "Matthew Hayden"
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 08:48, 23 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• Link Matthew Hayden in image per WP:REPEATLINK
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 08:48, 23 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• "Described as "a strong-built left-hander, an intimidating personality and [possessing] an aggressive attitude, [he] had all the ingredients that made him successful in international cricket", Hayden scored 8,625 runs in Tests and 6,133 runs in ODIs" I think that requires copy-editing, I don't understand the writing of it
  • The first part is just a quote, while the second part mentions his statistical record —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 08:48, 23 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• "He was named as" remove as, because it is redundant and unnecessary
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 08:48, 23 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• "Hayden was" was should be is, shouldn't it?
  • Which one are you referring to? —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 08:48, 23 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• "all formats of the game put together" add "with" at the beginning of that
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 08:48, 23 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• In ref 43, ESPNcricinfo should be a publisher, as are all other uses of it
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 08:48, 23 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

TBrandley 18:02, 22 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Not overly keen on having the kid in the lead picture, could you crop it?
  • I'm afraid I can't do that. It's very difficult to crop Hayden's image —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 07:09, 24 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • It's not that difficult, just use Paint or something. The Rambling Man (talk) 13:53, 28 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
      • The image would become too small if I crop Hayden's face. I'm a long way from an expert when it comes to working with images. Someone else can do it —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 06:45, 29 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
        • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 06:58, 29 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• Flickr has another image that could be used in this (and other Hayden articles), worth checking it out.
  • Saw that. The face is not at all visible in the image and the present one is better by all means —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 07:09, 24 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • Could use it anyway to demonstrate Hayden actually playing. The Rambling Man (talk) 13:53, 28 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
      • Doesn't the present image demonstrate Hayden? The image which you suggested also has Dhoni in the picture and someone might want to crop that one too —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 06:45, 29 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• Merge opening sentences.
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 07:09, 24 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• Check "organized" is AusEng (i.e. not "organised").
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 07:09, 24 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• Attribution requirements suggest we need to say who said that quote about his "aggressive attitude".
  • Not able to figure out the writer. —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 07:09, 24 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • Well, I would seek attribution correctly, per WP:QUOTE. The Rambling Man (talk) 13:53, 28 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
      • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 06:59, 29 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• Maybe link "bat" (in the "with the bat" quote) just in case.....
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 07:09, 24 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• "to score a century for the second time in his international career" -> "to score his second international century".
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 07:09, 24 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• "surpassing Brian Lara's record of 375." not referenced.
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 07:09, 24 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• "He scored centuries in each innings.." who? Last person you mentioned was Lara, but this is Hayden's list...
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 07:09, 24 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• Four paras in the lead seems too much for an article of this length...
  • We talk about Intro, Test, ODI and T20I+retirement phase. I absolutely don't have any idea on how to merge them —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 07:09, 24 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• "He made ten centuries against five different opponents.[12] He was most successful against New Zealand and India, scoring four and three centuries against each of them respectively.[12]" merge.
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 07:09, 24 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• "of 181 not out was against New Zealand in 2007,[11] an Australian record at the time." -> "of 181 not out against New Zealand in 2007,[11] was an Australian record at the time."
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 07:09, 24 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• " he never managed to score a century in ..." -> "he failed to score..."
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 07:09, 24 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• "any of the games, where his highest" -> "any game; his highest..."
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 07:09, 24 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• "After having served the Australian cricket team for a period of over 15 years," -> "After representing his country for over 15 years, Hayden retired from international cricket...."
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 07:09, 24 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• "of century-makers in international cricket, with all formats of the game put together" -> "international cricket in all formats combined."
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 07:09, 24 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• Don't link Hayden's name in the image captions, and don't repeat his first name.
  • I suggested that in the first place, as per WP:REPEATLINK. I disagree with that. TBrandley 16:59, 23 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • Interesting but (a) no need to repeat the first name and (b) I see no value at all in repeating the link in the opening sentence of the lead, the lead image and the next section image. Cheers. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:03, 23 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
      • Looking at WP:REPEATLINK again, it may not be "helpful for readers" if it is repeated in an image right beside the first link in lead. It would be good either way, IMO. Cheers, TBrandley 17:06, 23 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

The Rambling Man (talk) 16:57, 23 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• I know the quotes about the cricketers add some flavor to the lead section in each of these lists, but this one is not working at all grammar-wise. I suggest cutting some of it, and splitting the non-quote stat part of the sentence into its own sentence.
  • Strongly agree with your point. I find it difficult to cut the quote, perhaps you could suggest an idea. —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 17:00, 4 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • I'd stop the quote after "aggressive attitude", then write "with" followed by the "all the ingredients", and a non-quote "needed for success" or something like that. Maybe that will work better grammar-wise. Giants2008 (Talk) 22:07, 4 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
      • Only thing I see left is that a quotation mark should be added before the bracketed "with". It looks better now. Giants2008 (Talk) 03:14, 8 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
        • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 03:02, 11 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 14:33, 7 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• "surpassing Brian Lara's record of 375." It's somewhat vague what the record he broke actually is. Was it an Australian record?
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 17:00, 4 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• "was against New Zealand, was an Australian record at the time." Needs "and" before the second "was".
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 17:00, 4 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• No need for two South Africa cricket team links in the lead.
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 17:00, 4 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• For the first sentence of the fourth paragraph, if you need two semi-colons then the structure could probably use improvement. Try making the latter part "he failed to score a century in any game, recording a high score of 73 not out" or something similar. Giants2008 (Talk) 14:25, 2 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 17:00, 4 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• I would add a section header before going the main table
• Text shouldn't be bold, it is a MOS:BOLD and WP:ACCESS concern
• Use actual sub-section headers per WP:ACCESS

TBrandley 01:08, 30 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Done point 1 and 3. Where do you see bold text? — Crisco 1492 (talk) 01:12, 30 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • You just removed it. I would now suggest adding that table caption back per MOS:DTT, without bolding as it was before. TBrandley 01:58, 30 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • Got it myself. Cheers! TBrandley 03:16, 30 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Regarding the top message, I would add a "This article is about ...", then that for stuff. Use {{about}}.  Done
• "scored1142" your missing a space  Done
• "while only conceding" remove only per WP:NPOV  Done
• This is a big formatting mistake in the players section. So the table and images may should be in same area, make table width or image width smaller

• I didn't got you clearly but I think that there is some mis-understanding. It seems that there is some technical fault in MediaWiki software, and something is wrong in my and your browser. I just checked out some other lists (List of Delhi Daredevils cricketers, List of Indian Premier League five-wicket hauls, List of Indian Premier League umpires) and they are also not showing sortable lists. This is somewhat which happen to me every month, and I am tired of it.

• "doesn't" avoid contractions  Done
• Some images don't have alt text

• Would be a great help if you could list those images. This shows that each of them has alt text. ♛♚★Vaibhav Jain★♚♛ ^{Talk Email} 09:58, 5 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

TBrandley 23:23, 4 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Opening paragraph is a little choppy. Lots of short sentences and the rather jarring repeat of "It" or "Its".... makes for weak prose.  Done
• Perhaps worth noting that Watson is one of the foreign players to have represented RR while mentioning his record number of runs.

• I think that this will be unnecessary.

• "the fourth highest scorer" where is this referenced?  Done
• "most number of wicket for" -> "most wickets for".  Done
• Chitnis, one match, one inning, 12 runs, average of 6?  Done
• Watson has 1142 runs in lead, 1242 in table.  Done
• Watson's top score is 90* but he has no 50s?  Done
• Overall, troubling that a spot check revealed such data issues...  Done
• Don't see a need for a number column for captains because the "reigns" overlap in any case.  Done
• ESPNcricinfo has a small c.  Done

The Rambling Man (talk) 11:49, 8 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I have fixed some other errors also, hopefully everything is fine now. ♛♚★Vaibhav Jain★♚♛ ^{Talk Email} 14:39, 9 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "and then won the final from the Chennai Super Kings, claiming the title of the first IPL winner." and won the final against the Chennai Super Kings to become the first winner of the IPL
• "was cancelled due to 2008 Mumbai attacks." need to add the between to and 2008
• "In total, 63 players have played for RR..." In total is redundant
• "1242 runs" comma after the 1, this also applies to the figures in the tables that are over 1000
• Align the countries in the nationality column to the left, currently looks messy and hard to read
• Issue with the captains table, think you have added one row too many on the sort bottom function
• ref 4, 5 and 6 have differing date formats than the other refs, the other have the month first, while these three have the date first

NapHit (talk) 21:11, 11 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

 Done all. :) ♛♚★Vaibhav Jain★♚♛ ^{Talk Email} 11:02, 12 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "The BBI has not not been provided for those bowlers who have not taken any wicket while playing for RR."  Done
• Link "CricketArchive" and "ESPNcricinfo" at thier first usage in the references.  Done
  • "CricketArchive" should be linked at first usage. Zia Khan 20:50, 15 October 2012 (UTC)  Done[reply]
• Same for the BBC Sports.  Done
• Ref# 5 needs author.

• Author's name has been not provided in the news articles.

• Ref# 6: PTI should be Press Trust of India and put it in the publisher parameter, The Hindu should be in the work parameter. The reference needs author, too.

•  Done Again, author' name is not there. ♛♚★Vaibhav Jain★♚♛ ^{Talk Email} 12:26, 15 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Zia Khan 21:58, 13 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• No need for multiple Chennai Super Kings links in the lead.  Done
• Shane Warne photo caption: First name should be included, and "wicket" needs to be plural.  Done
• Rahul Dravid caption: "with the highest score of 66." → "with a high score of 66."?  Done
• BBI column has some weird sorting. Uniyal and Warne don't seem to be ordered right, and Jadeja doesn't seem to be in order for the second number.  Done
• Footnote 4: Should "the" be removed before RR? Also, the comma after the date could be a semi-colon instead.  Done Giants2008 (Talk) 03:25, 18 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

♛♚★Vaibhav Jain★♚♛ ^{Talk Email} 10:18, 18 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Footnote 1: "who have being not out in the inning/s they played" needs a rewrite.  Done

• Now reads "who have nve got our while playing for RR". Is this meant to be "who have never got out" or something like that?
•  Done Feel like slaping myself. ♛♚★Vaibhav Jain★♚♛ ^{Talk Email} 10:18, 19 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Giants2008 (Talk) 00:08, 19 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Try not to start a sentence with a number, like in "63 players have played for RR".

•  Done Changed it to alphabets.

• I'd add a hyphen between the numbers, but otherwise this is fixed now. Giants2008 (Talk) 00:08, 19 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Hyphen added. Thine Antique Pen (talk) 16:57, 5 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "A man in a white overall leaning standing" I don't understand that

fixed. NapHit (talk) 12:43, 18 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "ten-minute" not sure a hyphen is necessary

the f1 site uses a hyphen, so I'm going to stick with it for time being NapHit (talk) 12:43, 18 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "If a race is unable to be resumed then", add a comma after resumed

done NapHit (talk) 12:43, 18 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Per MOS:PUNCT, "Consistent use of the straight (or typewriter) apostrophe ( ' ) is recommended, as opposed to the curly (or typographic) apostrophe ( ’ )." That said, I see some instances of the curly being used in the list.

done NapHit (talk) 12:43, 18 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "half-points are awarded" again, not sure a hyphen is correct

done NapHit (talk) 12:43, 18 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "lap 5" 5 should be five, as per WP:MOSNUM

done NapHit (talk) 12:43, 18 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "Formula One World Championship races that have been red-flagged" can you add a "list of" at the first part of that table caption

there is no requirement to add this, its obivous its a list. NapHit (talk) 12:43, 18 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• I don't think you should, well, as questions, like "Was the race restarted?" could perhaps be changed to "This parameter indicates whether the race was restated.", or something

Nowhere is there "Was the race restarted?", there is a big difference between that and whether the race was restarted or not, one is a question one is a statement. NapHit (talk) 12:43, 18 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

The tooltip for the "R" column heading used to say "Was the race restarted?". I have changed it to "Race restarted". DH85868993 (talk) 01:07, 20 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Rather than saying "Y" or "N", could you write out fully, as "Yes" and "No", or clarify?

It is clarified in the key, its clear what they refer to. NapHit (talk) 12:43, 18 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• In some parts of the list (like the lede), you write "per cent" with a space, in others you don't, you write as "percent". Please be consistent.

done NapHit (talk) 12:43, 18 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "British Broadcasting Corporation" should be just simply "BBC", as per MOS:ACRO exceptions

nowhere does it state in that link that British Broadcasting Corporation should be BBC per an exception. NapHit (talk) 12:43, 18 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Any further categories?

Nope I think the current category is the most appropriate and there aren't others to include as far as I'm aware. NapHit (talk) 12:43, 18 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

TBrandley 23:05, 17 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the comments I've addressed them all. NapHit (talk) 12:43, 18 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• If a race is unable to be resumed then “the results will be taken at the end of the penultimate lap before the lap during which the signal to suspend the race was given.” Why is this in quote?

because that it is exactly what the source says. therefore it needs to be in quotation marks. NapHit (talk) 12:43, 18 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• 26 of the races were stopped on the first lap, all of which were subsequently restarted. Three of the races were stopped...... Sentences starts with similar words.

changed the to these, but not sure is any other way to word that sentence. NapHit (talk) 12:43, 18 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• when his car collided with the the back of Didier Pironi's Ferrari.

done NapHit (talk) 12:43, 18 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Most of the sentences in the table have a fullstop at their end while others not. What is the reason for that?

the ones that don't have a full stop are not complete sentences. Therefore, they don't need full stops. NapHit (talk) 12:43, 18 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I didn't understand, like for example rows (1989 Mexican Grand Prix and 1989 French Grand Prix) have similar sentences. The 1st has a fullstop at the end while the later not. Zia Khan 20:58, 18 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Ah yes those should have periods, added them now. NapHit (talk) 21:31, 18 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Link Fédération Internationale de l'Automobile in the references. Same for the other cites.

There is no requirement for there to be links in references. As I'm aware its based on personal preference. NapHit (talk) 12:43, 18 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• I would use publisher parameter for BBC Sports.

Again, I don't think this is an issue. Technically the publisher is the BBC not BBC Sport so this way is correct I believe. NapHit (talk) 12:43, 18 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Zia Khan 23:35, 17 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the comments, I've addressed them all. NapHit (talk) 12:43, 18 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I was unsure about this, but everywhere else I look I see it capitalised, so I'm hesitant to de-capitalise at the moment. NapHit (talk) 16:29, 21 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

The more I think about it, the more I'm convinced it should not be capitalized. As far as I can tell, it's not a proper noun. I just don't see any reason for it to be capitalized.

done NapHit (talk) 12:45, 23 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "one for drivers and one for constructors" – WP:EASTEREGG links. Perhaps link like this: "one for drivers and one for constructors"?

done NapHit (talk) 16:29, 21 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "was introduced in 2007, it involves" – Comma splice.

done NapHit (talk) 16:29, 21 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Make it "in 2007. It involves".

done NapHit (talk) 20:33, 21 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "a display of flag signals in the driver's cockpit to which alerts them to the accident"

done NapHit (talk) 16:29, 21 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "the pit exit is closed" – Wikilink?

there is only a wikilink for pit stop to have wikilinked that on first usage. NapHit (talk) 16:29, 21 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "before it returns to the pit lane" – Wikilink?

done per the above NapHit (talk) 16:29, 21 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "in 1950" – Getting rid of the WP:EASTEREGG would be nice. How about linking to 1950 British Grand Prix?

have now linked first World Championship Grand Prix (piped from your suggestion) and removed the 1950 link. NapHit (talk) 16:29, 21 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Still WP:EASTEREGGy. In fact I'm questioning the point of the "Since the first World Championship Grand Prix at Silverstone in 1950" bit. Wouldn't an "As of something" bit be more useful, telling the reader how up to date the numbers are?

I've removed the Easter egg link and changed the structure of that sentence retaining the start. I prefer using since, as it provides the reader with some context regarding Formula One and how often a red-fla has been shown during that time. NapHit (talk) 20:33, 21 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Fine. Although it still bugs me that so much emphasis is placed on that first grand prix. How about "Since the first World Championship Grand Prix in 1950, a red flag has been shown..."?

done NapHit (talk) 13:49, 27 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "due to incidents that resulted in fatalities" – Another WP:EASTEREGG. Perhaps link like this: "due to incidents that resulted in fatalities"?

done NapHit (talk) 16:29, 21 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "Race stopped due to rain" – Complete sentences require periods.

done NapHit (talk) 16:29, 21 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "Half points were awarded.^[A] – In the spirit of WP:REPEATLINK, place that footnote on each occurrence.

done NapHit (talk) 16:29, 21 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "Accident involving Niki Lauda" – WP:REPEATLINK. Multiple occurrences.

there is no link to Niki Lauda n that particular sentence, but I assume you're referring to the link in the winner's column as well. Repeatlinking in tables is permitted if the table is sortable, primarily because when the table is sorted the links are not in their original position, therefore it saves the reader scrolling around for one link. NapHit (talk) 16:29, 21 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

My reasoning exactly, which is why I'm asking for more links, not fewer.

I see, this issue should be fixed now. NapHit (talk) 20:33, 21 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• The (partially inconsistent) shortening of the sentences in the "Incident" column strikes me as awkward and unnecessary.

had a go at fixing these, hopefully these less awkwardly. NapHit (talk) 16:29, 21 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Honestly, I don't know what to make of sentences like these: "Stopped due to an accident involving nine cars, race was restarted over the original distance." There's enough space in the table to write "The race was stopped due to an accident involving nine cars. It was restarted over the original distance." In this expanded form, the comma splice becomes apparent, and I find myself raising an eyebrow to "restarting over the original distance". It's easy enough to figure out what is meant, but I wonder if not boring our readers with repetitive language warrants subjecting them to this. Now I'm far from a great copy-editor, but I'd feel much better about this if someone who is one told me it was fine.

I've expanded the sentences and they should read a lot better now. NapHit (talk) 20:33, 21 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "It was restarted over the original distance." – Weird wording. I'd say the race was resumed in cases of reduced distance.

I'm against using resumed as it implies the race carried on from similar circumstances to before the incident, when that is not the case. When a race is red-flagged, it is restarted in the same fashion as at the start. It is also officially referred to as a restart, so I'm against changing that. NapHit (talk) 12:45, 23 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "The race [insert was here?] stopped" – Multiple occurrences.
• "due to rain, it was restarted over the original distance." Comma splice. Multiple occurrences.
• "The race was stopped on [insert the here?] first lap"
• "The race was restarted on the aggregate timing of the first 30 laps and subsequent 33." – I don't understand. Multiple occurrences.
• "An Accident involving a number of cars" – Not a proper noun.
• "due to the Fatal accident of Ayrton Senna" – Not a proper noun.
• "Michael Schumacher subsequently crashed after the red flag was shown."

Ok, think i've fixed/clarified all these. NapHit (talk) 12:45, 23 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I'll examine the references later. Looking forward to support this nomination. Goodraise 13:50, 21 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the comments, I have addressed each one. NapHit (talk) 16:29, 21 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Revisited. Goodraise 18:48, 21 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I'm very close to supporting. There's just a few nits left for me to pick with the references. They all seem reliable, but the citation format is a wee bit unusual. Last time I read it top to bottom, WP:CITE basically said "meh, do whatever you like". Still, consistency would be nice.

• Refs. 6, 12, 16, 17 and 20: ESPN or ESPNF1? Make up your mind.

fixed NapHit (talk) 12:45, 23 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Giving "ESPNF1 staff" as author would appear rather pointless. I don't mind it being there, I'm just asking myself why bother pointing out that no authors have been named?

removed NapHit (talk) 12:45, 23 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• Using {{cite web}}'s |publisher= field for website names (off topic: is there a good translation for the German word zweckentfremden?) is one thing, as it's done far and wide. However, using its |work= field (according to the template documentation intended for website names) for website sections is pushing it. I'm not going to oppose over this, but I had to mention it at least.

I assume you're referring to the BBC sport references, I was not aware this was an issue, its actually widely done on references from this site, see here. I can change to just BBC Sport as publisher if you like? That was the way i formatted it before I was told otherwise NapHit (talk) 12:45, 23 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

It's not an issue. I just think it's unwise to use templates (which can change) in ways other than specified in their documentation. If you want to use this peculiar citation style, that's fine with me (as long as nothing is added to WP:CITE which would forbid it). However, it might be worth considering to format those citations manually, rather than abusing citation templates.

• And one more thing: The references in this article are all placed in footnotes, which is why I'd rename the "Footnotes" section to simply "Notes". By the way, you can nest cite.php footnotes using {{#tag:ref}}. Here is an example.

Hopefully, that'll be it from me. Goodraise 23:02, 22 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Changed footnotes to notes. NapHit (talk) 12:45, 23 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Revisited. Goodraise 23:13, 26 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Yet more, sorry.

• Multiple times the article says something to the effect of "an accident stopped the race". Should I take that to mean "the race was stopped due to an accident" or did these accidents literally stop those races?

changed them to the race was stopped due to an accident. NapHit (talk) 16:34, 27 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "It was restarted for a further 22 laps, and the time was combined with the first 58 laps." – I can guess what is meant here, but I don't like to guess. Each driver's times from the two partial races are summed up as his total time, right? Multiple occurrences.

I've clarified that this decided the race. It is hard trying to explain this term, but yes, the times from the two parts of the race are added to together to create an aggregate time. NapHit (talk) 16:34, 27 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Well, we are striving to meet professional standards of writing here. In light of that, I don't think the wording is clear enough yet.

• "The race was stopped due to a fatal accident involving Riccardo Paletti." – I wonder who died in that accident. Is it known?

Paletti died, changed it to make this clear. NapHit (talk) 16:34, 27 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "laps, and the time was combined" and "laps and the time was combined" – Consistency please.

done NapHit (talk) 16:34, 27 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "The race was stopped due to the fatal accident of Ayrton Senna." – Another easter egg link. How about "The race was stopped due to the fatal accident of Ayrton Senna"?

done NapHit (talk) 16:34, 27 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "The race was stopped due to the accidents of Mark Webber and Fernando Alonso." – Multiple occurrences.

done NapHit (talk) 16:34, 27 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Revisited. Goodraise 15:25, 27 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Revisited. Goodraise 21:49, 27 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

After all those changes to the "Incidents" column, I've got more:

• More than half of the races were "restarted over the original distance." How about not boring our readers with so much repetitive language and instead make use of the table format. For instance, the "R" column could distinguish between three cases, rather than two: "the race was not restarted", "the race was restarted over reduced distance" and "the race was completely restarted".

Done NapHit (talk) 21:52, 28 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• About a third of the races were stopped at least in part due to rain. How about using the table format to reduce some of the repetitive language? Having a dedicated column for whether rain contributed to the interruption of the race might be beneficial to our readers.

This is a good idea, but I do see a problem. Races win which rain was the only factor that stopped the race would leave the incident column blank. If that's not an issue then I'll happily add the column. NapHit (talk) 21:52, 28 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• All entries in the "Incidents" column currently start with "The race was stopped". Changing the column header could reduce the need for so much repetition. For instance, making the column header say "Red-flag prompting incident" would allow for that column's field in the 1990 Portuguese Grand Prix's line to say just: "An accident involving Aguri Suzuki and Alex Caffi".

done NapHit (talk) 21:52, 28 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Let me use this opportunity to thank you for your swift reactions and especially for putting up with what must seem like never-ending pedantry. Goodraise 21:49, 27 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

No problem at all. I have to say, the thoroughness of your review is refreshing. NapHit (talk) 21:52, 28 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Revisited. Goodraise 02:05, 29 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "Nine of these were stopped due to rain" – I'm counting more than nine. Am I missing something?

This is in relation to the previous sentence which mentions how many races were not restarted, of which there were nine. NapHit (talk) 13:23, 29 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Well, I'm still somewhat dissatisfied with that paragraph for various reasons, e.g. it is too verbose and unnecessarily complex in structure, even misleading. How about "Since the first World Championship Grand Prix in 1950, red flags have been shown in sixty-three races. Twenty-six were restarted on the first lap. Thirteen races, nine stopped because of rain and four due to accidents involving drivers, were not restarted. Three races were stopped due to incidents that resulted in fatalities: The 1975 Spanish Grand Prix was stopped on lap twenty-nine and not restarted after Rolf Stommelen's car crashed into a spectator area, killing five people. The 1982 Canadian Grand Prix was halted on the first lap after Riccardo Paletti was killed when his car collided with the back of Didier Pironi's Ferrari. The 1994 San Marino Grand Prix was red-flagged on lap five following the fatal accident of Ayrton Senna, in which his car crashed into a wall at the Tamburello curve."?

changed it to what you suggested. NapHit (talk) 13:37, 31 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "all of which were subsequently restarted."
• Racing flags – Already linked in the lead.

removed NapHit (talk) 13:23, 29 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "following the fatal accident of Ayrton Senna" – Easter egg link I should have noticed earlier.

done NapHit (talk) 13:23, 29 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "Three of these races were stopped due to incidents that resulted in fatalities." – I'd use a colon.

done NapHit (talk) 13:23, 29 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I really thought I'd've capped and supported by now, but every time I go over the article I find something new. Goodraise 02:05, 29 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• "A ten-minute warning is given before the race is resumed behind the safety car, which leads the field for a lap before it returns to the pit lane." – I wonder, if the safety car is involved in all restarts, why mention it specifically in some of the list entries?

Revisited. Goodraise 11:26, 31 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

This was a rule change that occurred around in 2005, so all races that have been red-flagged since then have been restarted behind the safety car. Can add this, but not sure about the best way to mention it. NapHit (talk) 13:37, 31 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I'd like to help, but it's rather difficult without knowing what exactly your source says. Goodraise 20:46, 31 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Its the sporting regulations for the 2005 season, so it mentions the procedure in similar vein to the lead. NapHit (talk) 21:16, 31 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Without access to the source (or a quotation), I can't help you much. If a safety car hasn't always been used, the reader might like to know when this procedure was introduced and what was done before. Goodraise 12:20, 1 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I've added a bit about it now. NapHit (talk) 13:32, 1 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Actually, I don't understand why this (safety car related) stuff is relevant in the first place. I'm not a racing fan, so I'm probably missing something, but it doesn't seem all that important to me (within the context of this article) how the restarts were carried out. If you think that kind of information is important, by all means include it, but keep it balanced and consistent. How things are handled today should not be given more attention than how they were handled 20 years ago, or 20 years before that. (See WP:RECENTISM.) Along the same line, I don't understand why the article mentions who restarted behind the safety car, but not who restarted from pole position before 2005. Goodraise 17:53, 1 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• The second "Lap" in the key is not a proper noun so should not be capitalized.

done NapHit (talk) 21:33, 22 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

• It strikes me as odd that there is one red flag in 1950 and then none for twenty years. Is there any reason for this, or is it purely coincidental?