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I apologize if this is not the correct venue to suggest this change. Please point me in the right direction if I am mistaken. I see three possible problems with this blurb, ordered from most to least bothersome:
- "Landfall" is wikilinked to the same stub twice.
- "...finally dissipated near the Great Lakes, when it was absorbed..." It would be clearer to say "where it was absorbed."
- "...strengthened to a tropical storm, receiving the name Katrina; then, it proceeded to make landfall..." The semicolon-then-comma construction is needlessly awkward. Omit needless words instead and say "...receiving the name Katrina. The storm made landfall..."
I propose the following slightly altered new version:
The meteorological history of Hurricane Katrina, an extremely destructive Category 5 hurricane, began on August 23, 2005 when it originated as Tropical Depression Twelve near the Bahamas. The next day, the tropical depression strengthened to a tropical storm, receiving the name Katrina. The storm made landfall on southern Florida as a minimal hurricane. After passing through Florida, Katrina weakened back to a tropical storm; however, the warm waters of the Gulf of Mexico allowed it to rapidly intensify to the sixth strongest Atlantic hurricane in history. Afterwards, Katrina made landfall as a Category 3 storm near Buras-Triumph, Louisiana, and once more near the Mississippi/Louisiana border. Following its landfall, Katrina progressed up through the central United States and finally dissipated near the Great Lakes, where it was absorbed by a cold front. (more...)
Thoughts? ➪HiDrNick! 02:13, 14 June 2007 (UTC)
Done. Cheers. --MZMcBride 02:21, 14 June 2007 (UTC)
